Heart of Stone: Sphyci_b

[Quesla]

Hi Sphyci? (sp?) I am thoroughly enjoying Mary's story. I am however having some trouble getting a true visual of Aidrean (sp?) Maybe I have him confused with a Griffin? Is his tail reptilian or lion like. I can"feel/see it's prehensil nature. The ears are fuzzy and triangular? like a cat or something like a bats? with the jewelry rings in the outer edges before the points at the top? He is fine scaled, like a cross between a fine scaled snakes or lizards and grey like masonry stone like garden sculpture fountains? His face is mostly human except the fangs and his taloned hands and feet? I think his eyes Are mentioned as dark brown. Are they cat or lizard shaped or very plainly human?I have always pictured gargoile eyes as golden yellow and slanted cat like. Are his arms and legs human structured? or is his legs more haunch like a lions?I picture his wings as leathe bat like wit he claw handfinges on he middle joints. I am imagininghow theother mmbers of e magic cmmunity illease the babyhumangargoil into the human world and ho the predudice human communiy will react. It would be almost aswryling asit was to white people accept blacks into the mainstrem society! As you can see, I am picturing your story gargoile world very vivdly! I love it. It is realiticaly done! Love & Light: The Blin Witch,Quesla.

 

[psyche_b_mused]

I'm glad you're getting so much enjoyment from Heart of Stone. I'm certainly enjoying writing it. I've always wanted a picture of Aiden for situations just like these, unfortunately I've never found anything that looks quite like him, and I have no talent when it comes to drawing. LOL So...here's the best i can do. Most of this is in the story somewhere, but it's scattered and may not be as clear as it could be.

Aiden is close to 8 feet tall. His basic body type is essentially that of a very large human male in excellent physical condition. Broad shoulders, narrow waist, defined muscles, especially in his chest because of the fact that he flies. His wings are similar to a bat's wings.

His facial features I would say are heavier than one would expect. He has a very heavy brow ridge, deep set eyes, his nose has been broken at least once and shows signs of healing not quite straight. His eyes are a shade of green, probably about the shade of a green bottle with sunlight coming through it. Other than the unusual color, they are essentially human in appearance. His ears are in the same place and orientation as a human being's are. The difference is that they would look a bit large and pointed at the tips. The rings are placed one on the lobe, one midway up the back of the ear and the last one at the tip. The final two would look similar to decorative piercings that go through the cartilage. He also has two sets of horns. The first and largest curl like the horns of a ram, around to the back of his head. There is a second smaller set in front of them.

His tail is more reptilian in appearance. His skin is just gray stone during the day. When he's awake though, the scales are fine enough that you have to be pretty close to see them. They also reflect colors, so instead of appearing JUST gray, depending on the light he might have a gray with purplish/bluish/greenish undertone. The color is very subtle though. His hands are very human except for the talons. His feet are a little different. He has 4 elongated toes (also with talons) and balances more on the balls of his feet. They allow him to grasp an opponent in the air, or something that he might want to balance on.

Like all gargoyles, he has no hair on his body at all, one of the reasons for his little 'request' of Mary. G

I hope this gives you a better image of him in your mind's eye.
Thanks for reading!

Psyche b

 

[Quesla]

Aidrian?

I'm glad you're getting so much enjoyment from Heart of Stone. I'm certainly enjoying writing it. I've always wanted a picture of Aiden for situations just like these, unfortunately I've never found anything that looks quite like him, and I have no talent when it comes to drawing. LOL So...here's the best i can do. Most of this is in the story somewhere, but it's scattered and may not be as clear as it could be.

Aiden is close to 8 feet tall. His basic body type is essentially that of a very large human male in excellent physical condition. Broad shoulders, narrow waist, defined muscles, especially in his chest because of the fact that he flies. His wings are similar to a bat's wings.

His facial features I would say are heavier than one would expect. He has a very heavy brow ridge, deep set eyes, his nose has been broken at least once and shows signs of healing not quite straight. His eyes are a shade of green, probably about the shade of a green bottle with sunlight coming through it. Other than the unusual color, they are essentially human in appearance. His ears are in the same place and orientation as a human being's are. The difference is that they would look a bit large and pointed at the tips. The rings are placed one on the lobe, one midway up the back of the ear and the last one at the tip. The final two would look similar to decorative piercings that go through the cartilage. He also has two sets of horns. The first and largest curl like the horns of a ram, around to the back of his head. There is a second smaller set in front of them.

His tail is more reptilian in appearance. His skin is just gray stone during the day. When he's awake though, the scales are fine enough that you have to be pretty close to see them. They also reflect colors, so instead of appearing JUST gray, depending on the light he might have a gray with purplish/bluish/greenish undertone. The color is very subtle though. His hands are very human except for the talons. His feet are a little different. He has 4 elongated toes (also with talons) and balances more on the balls of his feet. They allow him to grasp an opponent in the air, or something that he might want to balance on.

Like all gargoyles, he has no hair on his body at all, one of the reasons for his little 'request' of Mary. G

I hope this gives you a better image of him in your mind's eye.
Thanks for reading!

Psyche b

Oh, Thank-you Sphyci! I now have an in full colour image and understanding of how Aidrian (sp) would carry prey and be able to handle the human surroundings. I also have a sound track of what he'd sound like on hardwood and marble floors! He is a very dynamic and colourful looking character now. I liked his personality through his dialogue. I am starting to get an idea of Gargoile society with the father based family attitude, rather than the male force rule of RC (Roman Catholic patriarchy. I have always had a big distaste of the church baptist & RC. run man can do no wrong, but woman is by base nature a sinner and has to be forceably kept in line by father and husband who are their owners. This gives the story much more depth with the guidance of a family father head and tribe leader/protector. Lots of appreciation: Quesla, The Blind Witch.

 

[KnightinArmor]

Hello Psyche. I recently read Heart of Stone and I just have to say. lt was nearly impossible to stop reading until l finished that last chapter. I do love erotic stories, but I do have something special to say about this one..You are a damn good writer & Heart of Stone is the first story I've read on this site that captivated me with the plot and story even more than the sexual aspects. I could have screamed when I finished the last chapter still needing to know who or what that evil man is, & more about the people who've protected the gargoyles & their history. Your writing talent goes beyond the erotic & I think Heart of Stone is worthy of a full length published book. Even if it contained no sex, I'd buy it in a heartbeat just to discover all the questions that were left unanswered. I hope someday you have the time to bring it to completion. It's worth it. Thankyou for sharing

 

[psyche_b_mused]

Wow, Thank you SO much KnightinArmor!
I've loved writing Heart of Stone and I'm so glad that you're enjoying reading it as much! Don't worry, it will continue and hopefully in a timely manner. That's my goal anyway.....if life doesn't intervene. I never really thought of it as publishable...more along the lines of practice because of the nonhuman/human erotic content, but I've always dreamed of being a novelist. I'll hope that this isn't a one-off!

I hope you continue to enjoy the story as it continues...let me know either way. I love to know what people who read my stories think

psyche b

 

[KnightinArmor]

Holy Crap!! I hit the jackpot. When I finished the last shapter, it ended at 8 & now its up to 13 WooooHooooo. I think I should peek more often LOL 1 good thing about fantasy writing. you have many more possibilities & not limited to reality. Gunna go read!!

 

[Quesla]

The book behind the painting?

Hi Sphyci? The title in the leather cover of the book is in english characters? The pages inside are in old English or Is it Gargoile circle thought form?As for Carolynne? I am beginning to suspect her allegences. I wasn't sure if she was supposed to know of the secret basement library? She sure came upon Adrian & Mary inspecting the discovery conveniently? I feel like her knitting might be a cover up as an excuse??? I am also wondering if Stewart? the other half of the magic families factioning may have connetcions with Maggie and Daren, the milk curddler? That character gives me the CREEPS! Love & Light: Quesla Keep up the good work!

 

[psyche_b_mused]

Well now i can't give away TOO much....i mean...then what would be the fun of reading?? The script on the cover of the book is in English characters and gargoyle characters. What's inside.....will be addressed in the next chapter. As to Darren and his suspected alliances...welllll you might have to wait a little longer for that to become clearer.

Keep Reading!
Psyche b

 

[KnightinArmor]

ok!!!! I just got home from work & went to bed in the middle of chapter 10. & Spent most of the day wondering about that painting of the twins. LOL This is exactly what keeps me reading. You let me know what peeks Mary's curiousity & let us know something isn't right & keep us coming back for more.. As good as the discription of the painting, I thought your discription of everything Mary couldn't quite make out masterful. Well done!! You do a great job of letting us know everything Mary knows & keep us equally frustrated as Mary is when she has suspicions. I feel like I'm standing beside her & constantly finding myself asking the same questions. A good writer has talent in letting the reader close his eyes & actually see the surroundings you put him in. A damn good writer is equally skilled at letting the reader see what's missing without giving it away. Thats where I think you're a damn good writer & that painting is a perfect example. Just thought I'd let you know

 

[psyche_b_mused]

Hi KnightinArmor!

I'm really glad you're continuing to enjoy the story. The painting was something I was worried about. There really was a great deal that I wanted to convey with it, and even after I finished that section I worried that I had missed the mark completely. I'm relieved to know that I didn't.

Thank you as always for your wonderful compliments. You inspire me to write faster!

Psyche b

 

[JackLuis]

Wonderful Story!

Just thought I'd post on the most recent thread to let you know that I found the sexual parts interesting, but not why I read the last 8 chapters.

If he is covered with fine scales, doesn't it kind of chafe when he tail fucks her? Just a odd question that popped up in my mind.

 

[psyche_b_mused]

They're fine enough that they feel like human skin...especially on his extremities...like his tail....and his other intimate places. Glad you like the sex too....that's actually gratifying....*L*

psyche b

 

[KnightinArmor]

Still goin strong!

Hi KnightinArmor!

I'm really glad you're continuing to enjoy the story. The painting was something I was worried about. There really was a great deal that I wanted to convey with it, and even after I finished that section I worried that I had missed the mark completely. I'm relieved to know that I didn't.

Thank you as always for your wonderful compliments. You inspire me to write faster!

Psyche b

Hello Psyche
I just finished Chapter 11 & I'm still as hooked as before. Chapter 14 is submitted?? I can't even imagine how many more will be written to complete this piece of art with everything that's still waiting to be resolved & accomplished. Wow!!!. It's worth the wait though. As far as the painting goes, you gave yourself a hell of a task if you wished to write out every detail, & I'm glad you didn't, you said what was needed & left the rest for the reader to fill in to see it in our minds. That's one aspect of reading that's superior to TV in my opinion. I'm glad you basically skipped over the details of Aiden's introduction to Joanna. I think it would've been repetitive to go moment by moment again, but now I'm curious as to her acceptance & interaction with him. I guess I wish there was a bit more time spent between Aiden, Mary & Joanna talking after the initial shock. I don't worry though. I have faith all will be covered & made clear soon. You do well at tying up those loose ends when the time is right, but your story does require a bit of patience for details & discovery. Thats a good thing though because I'd get bored if everything was exposed up front. I think the key to a great book or story is giving the reader something to look forward to in the next chapter, & getting the right balance between story progression (answering questions) & adding a bit of curiosity to make the reader need to read the next. This seems to be 1 of your strong suits.
As far as the sex? It's nice actually, enough to enjoy the erotic aspects without so much that it overwhelms the story. I'm also very pleased in how you write about their sex life. The usual words like cock, pussy & cunt would seem out of place to me in the setting & mood of this story. You make me wish I could spend time in a home like Beeson Hall too. LOL lt just makes me want to travel to Britain even more & see my own family castle. Keep up the good work.

 

[psyche_b_mused]

I wish i could spend time in a home like Beeson Hall too! *L* Maybe that's why I set the story there...an unconscious wish. I thank you for being patient in waiting for those discoveries....I want to keep it interesting, but not everything can happen at once. Besides....I'm kind of evil. I want all the little details to 'simmer' in the reader's mind, so that they can have that AH HA moment (or a UH OH moment I guess) in the interim between revelations.

As to their sex life.......I see Mary and Aiden as a very ordinary, loving, monogamous couple. They just happen to look a little different. Besides, I always think I sound silly when I use naughty words. *LOL*

Thank you for reading!
psyche b

 

[KnightinArmor]

Oops. found a couple boo-boo's

I'm currently in the middle of Ch. 13 & just happened to catch a couple typo's I thought you'd like to be aware of in case you have the chance to fix them. I'm not at all being ctitical, just helpful. They were both in part 1 of Ch. 13
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Aiden moved back just enough to allow his mouth to find hers. Even the small movement made Mary squirm and whimper with need. He didn't make her wait long. --He moved with move--intensity than she had,
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"Why do you have such trust in this man?" Aiden asked.

"I've --never-- known him since I was a child and I've never met a more honest, forthright person.
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I don't consider myself to be qualified as a critic. l HATED english class in school & until recently had never written anything aside from paperwork or letters home during my navy years. I've written 2 very hot true stories that have made a few online female friends want to jump through the screen into my lap. However due to the need to properly edit, the 1st has already been rejected by this site. I think it's more than worthy of a nice big red "H" but I'm obviously still in the process of learning. I've also caught myself too many times making the same typo's & I know too well how easy it is to make them. I hope this helps!
Knight

 

[psyche_b_mused]

Thanks for the heads up on the typos KnightinArmor. I edit for myself and sometimes I miss things because I know what it should say. Unfortunately, once a chapter is posted I don't know how to go back and correct the errors. I do the best I can and hope people will forgive me my imperfections. Unfortinately, that's kind of embarrassing because I work as a tutor writing (among other things) at the same college I attend....Nothing creative, just essays...but still. *L*

If you need another pair of eyes to edit your first story though, I'd be happy to help. If you trust me, that is. *L*
psyche b

 

[KnightinArmor]

Thanks for the heads up on the typos KnightinArmor. I edit for myself and sometimes I miss things because I know what it should say. Unfortunately, once a chapter is posted I don't know how to go back and correct the errors. I do the best I can and hope people will forgive me my imperfections. Unfortinately, that's kind of embarrassing because I work as a tutor writing (among other things) at the same college I attend....Nothing creative, just essays...but still. *L*

If you need another pair of eyes to edit your first story though, I'd be happy to help. If you trust me, that is. *L*
psyche b

Well, things happen. & l've done the same thing too often. I tend to be more worried about misspelling than anything else, & unfortunately even with spell check, it only corrects spelling, not how the words are used. Even a computer wouldn't have caught those. As far as my stories. You're more than welcome to peek at them. Like I said, I'm no author, my skills are more from learning through reading more than schooling. the 1 and only skill I can claim is in spelling, & little else Hahaha

 

[JackLuis]

--. the 1 and only skill I can claim is in spelling, & little else Hahaha

Well you are ahead of a lot of folks if you can spell consistantly.

I am self tought in both Spelling and typing.
Still got a few Red "H"s and having a hell of a time here.

 

[Quesla]

Esme's unfamilarity withDecent faily land holigs?

Hi Sphyci? Would the reason Adrian had to accompany Esme hunting be that Carolynn's family's property be the only holdings that her clan have Gargoile rights to hunt on unaccompanied?Adrian is protector of Decent hall and land holdings. So he would be obligated to escort other gargoile visitors in granting the permission to hunt on other protected familys land? The chapter was quite short and left us hanging. I presume? that's intentional. I am anxious to see how Esme situates in the political circles that are brewing in the human magic memberscommunty. Will she and Carolynne rturn to their inherited famly holdings? I also see a friendship developing between Mary & Esme. The dialogue between Adrian, Esme and Mary is very well done with the gargoile and human translations by Adrian.I have always had trouble translating between my English human space travellers and my alien humanoid planet inhabitants! I won't get into the United Nations Eclipse's/Zephyrians interactions, as I have not even properly plotlined the story yet! If I ever gt it of the ground, It'll be my first submission! Love & Light: Quesla.

 

[psyche_b_mused]

Aiden accompanies Esme for a couple of reasons: Esme has just awakened to a whole new world. When she was frozen, gargoyles were known. Aiden wants Esme to be able to hunt safely and to that she needs to know where she can go to remain hidden. Second, because of his position, and the fact that he's male, Aiden feels responsible for her safety and well-being.

Thanks for reading!
psyche b

 

[Quesla]

Esme's Escort.

Aiden accompanies Esme for a couple of reasons: Esme has just awakened to a whole new world. When she was frozen, gargoyles were known. Aiden wants Esme to be able to hunt safely and to that she needs to know where she can go to remain hidden. Second, because of his position, and the fact that he's male, Aiden feels responsible for her safety and well-being.

Thanks for reading!
psyche b

Oh, It suddenly dawned on slow as a retard me, that there's airplanes and helicopters flying about now-a-days! Would not want a flying machine to encounter a lone female giant bat with roughly human shape and big claws and teeth in their skies! That would be hard to explain in our modern times and would make the press in not a nice or friendly way!*Giggle!* Quesla, The Blind Witch

 

[Quesla]

Truking it or chopper?

Oh, It suddenly dawned on slow as a retard me, that there's airplanes and helicopters flying about now-a-days! Would not want a flying machine to encounter a lone female giant bat with roughly human shape and big claws and teeth in their skies! That would be hard to explain in our modern times and would make the press in not a nice or friendly way!*Giggle!* Quesla, The Blind Witch

Hi Spyci? I remember Adrian & Mary having a bit of an argument on Esme being lowerd onto the balcony of his bedroom? In he end she was put in the garden. So she wasn't lowered by helicopter to her resting place? I certainly don't remember any mention of a truck in the purchas and transport of Esme.I may go back and re-read that part. Esme was at Carolyn's old estate which was in the poor house and she had had to ? shack up wit Andrew??? Are there each a whole clan of gargoiles per family estate, and so,? more than one stone figure on each property??? It brins a whole new impact to the trucking transport problem. Chopter's ar also expensive to gas up to lift such heavy stone monuments into the air. Yes, they do use some very powerful chopters to lift such heavy stuff in real life. I am anxious to hear the live politics of a mixed gathering of gargoile clans on Decent estate!!! Looking forward to it! Love & Light:Quesla

 

[psyche_b_mused]

The decision about where to place Esme was made before they knew she was female. Aiden and Mary assumed this was another male gargoyle and Aiden didn't want another male so close to Mary, so the decision was made that the new one be placed in the garden. I left it to the reader's imagination exactly how she got there. Caroline was given a place in Andy's household (probably as some sort of servant), though i wouldn't term that as shacking up. It wasn't sexual. As to the clans, yes, there was one clan per family. Each member of a clan turns to stone during the day (clan with 25 members = 25 statues in the daylight) The one who is left on each property are the lone surviving representatives of their respective clans.

Thanks for reading!
psyche b

 

[Quesla]

memorial/diintegration of recent gargoile:

The decision about where to place Esme was made before they knew she was female. Aiden and Mary assumed this was another male gargoyle and Aiden didn't want another male so close to Mary, so the decision was made that the new one be placed in the garden. I left it to the reader's imagination exactly how she got there. Caroline was given a place in Andy's household (probably as some sort of servant), though i wouldn't term that as shacking up. It wasn't sexual. As to the clans, yes, there was one clan per family. Each member of a clan turns to stone during the day (clan with 25 members = 25 statues in the daylight) The one who is left on each property are the lone surviving representatives of their respective clans.

Thanks for reading!
psyche b

Hi, Quesla here:I have neglected my favourite writers for a while, although I hav definitely kept up reding! I can't wait to hearwht the rpercussions of Aiden's protector and daughter/guardian/ownersi titles will cuse amongst heobjective, Kitra and those thatmiht opose the Leader's mateship. Also waitig o hear of newinterferances by Darn and thedshonest ex maid of Decent Hall.How will thefailure to wake Cry-what's his-name affect Mary'scircle guidance magic? Does she doubt herself after this failure? Anxious to read more, I'm sorry I haven't kept in touch: Quesla, The Blind fWitch.

 

[psyche_b_mused]

I'm glad you're still reading the story. I haven't had as much time to work on it lately as I would like, but hopefully in the next week or so i'll have something ready to post. Darn real life sometimes.

Thanks for reading!
psyche b