Editor needed for ganbang story with a difference

[Thomas Drablézien]

The story in question is about a French lady of 'easy virtue', however despite her reputation and many lovers she is a pillar of her local community and keen charity fund raiser. In order to raise funds for a special appeal she decides to organise a gang-bang with a difference in a nearby swingers club. This happens and she raises lots of money. (approx. 5000 words)

And that in a nutshell is the plot of my story.

My problem is however much I re-read and revise this story I can not get the narrative to flow properly.

If there is any one who can do a critical review of this piece and give me a few notes as to where I can improve it I will be most grateful. - I can send potential editors / reviewers the text in MSWord 2000 .doc, .rtf, or plain text formats.


All the best

TD

 

[Thomas Drablézien]

Found, I hope

I got one PM response to the OP so hopefully the matter is now in hand. I just have to wait for a gap of several time-zones (Romance(?) (GMT+1) to EST) to catch up with each other.

Oh the joy of internet communications!

Tom D

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... I just have to wait for a gap of several time-zones (Romance(?) (GMT+1) to EST) to catch up with each other. ...

Once you are going, that actually works in your favour - you write while the editor sleeps and vice versa. It is faster than someone in the same time zone where you write today and they edit tomorrow and you work on it the next day.

 

[Thomas Drablézien]

Good point, hadn't thought of that. Of course there might still be the "two countries divided by a common language" problem to overcome. - We shall see

It's all a learning curve.