Kinda Stuck

Military Mech

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Hey all,

I've written these two parts of my story, and seem to have gotten stuck. I got REALlY stuck in between chap 1& 2 as it took me about a year to get the second chapter out! Those of you who have read (or want to) the Mind Ops want to give me some ideas of where to go from here?

Right now, I jumped ahead to where Jimmy is in Iraq and is having flashbacks to Boot Camp and how get got "found out"...... But i'm getting stuck.....


IDEAS!!!!!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=307880&page=submissions

Let me know if you want me to post what I have of Pt3.
 
Hey all,

I've written these two parts of my story, and seem to have gotten stuck. I got REALlY stuck in between chap 1& 2 as it took me about a year to get the second chapter out! Those of you who have read (or want to) the Mind Ops want to give me some ideas of where to go from here?

Right now, I jumped ahead to where Jimmy is in Iraq and is having flashbacks to Boot Camp and how get got "found out"...... But i'm getting stuck.....


IDEAS!!!!!

You've done a straight-ahead narrative in the first two chapters, so I can see where flashbacks might be more challenging. There usually has to be a reason for the flashbacks rather than having them pop up spontaneously; for instance, Jimmy might meet some overbearing Iraqi that reminds him of his DI in Boot.

If you want to do the "Local Boy Makes Good" theme, have Jimmy meet an Iraqi girl who is close to a wanted terrorist and, through her, he gets close enough to single-handedly (using his mind control powers, of course) bag the bad guy.

Just a thought.
 
Mech:
I like the 2 chapters. Considering the situation in Iraq now, why not let Jimmy decide that he doesn't want to be a Jarhead and have him join the Navy. Ship out as a yoeman on a Tin can that takes a world criuse, maybe transfering from the Pacific to the Med fleet?

Then you can have him in ports around the world exercising his mind control and helping his buddies get laid for cash he sends home to his mom's account so she can control his asshole dad?


If you've got to have him in the Crotch then make him a fleet Marine and he can milk the squids for money, and treat his buddies to free pussy in Sasabo. Ha Ha.


Then his 'special powers" are found out and he is transfered to Inteligence and he is handed over the CIA ?

The ideas are endless and the manner you used to tell the story, kind of loose and humorously, will allow you to get Jimmy into and out of all kinds of adventures?

Maybe the CIA gets him close to Amidenijad and has him develop an intense desire to fuck a goat in the main square in full view of the head Mulla of Iran.
The mulla can see old Amidenijad gets his fill of goats and has him tied to a nanny as he is buried up to his neck in goat shit.

Or maybe Jimmy gets almost ready to save the situation in Iraq and his GungHo Col. get's him killed in some stupid raid and the world is lost as Jimmy is the only one who can control the Mullas in Iraq and without him they start a Holy War that ends with Sara Palin Nuking Baghdad in a knejerk reaction to their blasphmy.

OR ?? You figure it out guy but don't let it get too serious, Have some fun!
 
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