Dirty Reverend.......

[tammytoodles]

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[AngloSexon]

This is pretty pervy... But the build-up sounds a little too problematic due to length. Why not start it with him officiating at her husband's funeral, and get inside his head - the things he's fantasised about?

Also, the leather couch sounds a little too comfortable. If it's about humiliation, there must be a lot more unpleasant surfaces for her to have to deal with? Don't know wheher you'd find this sacreligious, but how about on the altar?

 

[tammytoodles]

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[AngloSexon]

Hey Anglo....I like your suggestions very much! He discovers her at the funeral and basically attaches himself to her side.....how about on his desk in his office?....he pushes her down forward and takes her from behind

Yeah, this is good. Insinuates himself upon her - pity, knew him, good man... Stuff like this. Then yes, "Step into my office a while..." And definitely face down. I had that in mind when I made my suggestion. The desk is therefore pretty damn good, hard, maybe cluttered... Leather top? Something sensual to deal with; softness covering hardness, while she's being pumped and held down? God, this has got potential!

Whose perspective are you going to write it from? Or is it going to be third person narrative?

By the way, Tammy, thanks for being so welcoming about my suggestions! I look forward to hearing more... And maybe discussing more, too!

 

[tammytoodles]

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[AngloSexon]

Hey Anglo! Excellent ideas! I like the leather topped desk idea!....I think third person would be great......I've never written a story on here before so not sure if I will actually go forward with it or not. I like the shock of the betrayal, she really trusted this man in her time of need and then before she knows it he has one of her arms behind her back and is shoving her down, bending her over his desk, pulling her dress up, panties down and violating her in the worst possible way. She doesn't really know anyone in this small town very well and doubts anyone would believe her over him of course so she keeps quiet and tries to avoid him......what do you think?

I love the idea, and I really think you should follow it through - you've really got the shock aspect well thought out. Go with it; perhaps - to give it balance - you could have her plot an equally humiliating revenge (seducing his wife and forcing him to watch as she pleasures her?)

 

[tammytoodles]

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[AngloSexon]

Hey Anglo....that is very hot! Of course he would think sex between women was wrong but he would find it highly arousing watching it which would further humiliate and infuriate him!

Good! Depends how you want to take it from there; either you could leave him high and dry - in which case she gets total revenge for her humiliation - or, having decided that he's been punished enough, she relents and invites him for a threesome... The spirit of Christian forgiveness?!

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... Whose perspective are you going to write it from? Or is it going to be third person narrative? ...

I strongly suggest third person - that way we can enjoy the thoughts of both of them as well as their actions. If she is face down she won''t see much, so the reader won't get a description of the look on his face as he makes that first triumphant thrust into her, no matter which other POV you use.

 

[AngloSexon]

I strongly suggest third person - that way we can enjoy the thoughts of both of them as well as their actions. If she is face down she won''t see much, so the reader won't get a description of the look on his face as he makes that first triumphant thrust into her, no matter which other POV you use.

Agreed - but it depends on the nature of the fantasy being depicted. The situation seems to be rape/humiliation; why not let the reader imagine what he looks like - like the "monster" in an old horror movie, conveyed with shadow and sound? Carefully done, by describing sensations and what she can hear, you can give an impressionistic view of what you're suggesting. "I suddenly felt his hand on my thigh, firm, controlling, pulling my legs apart. There was no lessening of tension in his other arm holding me down, though; he was the master of the situation. I was so afraid of what I knew was coming, but I couldn't prevent it, and no matter how I tried to resist, my efforts were fruitless. Then suddenly, it came - rough, questing. It hurt me, but I know he didn't care, as the first thrust seemed to tear me ceaselessly. His grunts, the foul obscenities, so unbecoming of a man of his calling, told me that he didn't care. He wanted me, and he had me." Or something like this...

 

[tammytoodles]

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[emap]

Submitting is easy, on the main page there is a link to submitting stories. That will take you to a how to section and a link to get to your author's page. It uses the same profile as for the forums if it asks for ID and password.

Once at your authors page, bookmark it, then click on the submissions and submit. There you want to copy and paste, possible to send them the document, but can take longer. You also need to name it and come up with a little blurb that people will read before clicking on the link to read it.

 

[tammytoodles]

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[emap]

Thanks.

You don't have to do it 3rd person as snoopy said, you can show his expression not by saying he has a dirty leer or something. Instead something like the below.


I sit down at the chair across from his desk as he moves behind me to get some coffee. I prattle on about how much I appreciate his care and understanding in helping me deal with the loss of my husband, his help in arranging the funeral and his wonderful words spoken in the church and at the cemetary. His silence I assume to be just him listening and letting me cool down to cry again at my loss, that is until his arms are grabbing me under my arms, pulling me up and shoving me over his desk.

I grunt as my hands fly out to try and stop the descent onto his desk, sending papers, mail and newspapers flying. For a brief moment his hands leave my sides, before pressing down on my back, flattening me to the desk. One hand pressing down hard at my back between my shoulder blades, the other roaming down my body over my butt, pausing to squeeze for a minute before moving lower. As his second leaves my body for what I know to be my skirt, I try and scream. His hand pressing at my back shoving me into the desk, the leather deskpad rubbing roughly against me makes it hard to breath. All I can muster is a squeek before he's leaning over me, telling me to be quiet, that I want this.

My skirt is rasing, I can feel it moving between us, how it is suddenly bunched and pressing into me in a new place. I try and get out from under him, saying no as many times as I can as my skirt is pulled up over my butt and then my panties are being pulled down. I expect him to pull them off of me completely, meaning he would have to get off of me, but he doesn't, instead he leaves them midthigh, his hand grabbing at his pants. I can hear the zipper going down, it's so loud in this little room that it sounds like he is standing next to my ear.

His hardness is pressing at me, not in the right place to enter but he soon remedies that with his hand. Lined up with me he starts to push it in, but is unable because of the friction, he spits, I don't know where but I hear him, then a moistened hardness is pressing into me. This time he is able to enter me fully, with a grunted oh yes he presses the entirety of himself in me. I find enough breath to scream no this time, he does nothing but lean closer and tell me that the door is unlocked, the louder I get the bigger the chance someone will come in and see me enjoying sex.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

Agreed - but it depends on the nature of the fantasy being depicted. The situation seems to be rape/humiliation; why not let the reader imagine what he looks like - like the "monster" in an old horror movie, conveyed with shadow and sound? Carefully done, by describing sensations and what she can hear, you can give an impressionistic view of what you're suggesting.
"I suddenly felt his hand on my thigh, firm, controlling, pulling my legs apart. ...

You don't have to do it 3rd person as snoopy said, you can show his expression not by saying he has a dirty leer or something. Instead something like ...
"His hand pressing at my back shoving me into the desk, the leather deskpad rubbing roughly against me makes it hard to breathe. All I can muster is a squeak before he's leaning over me, telling me to be quiet, that I want this.
My skirt is raised, I can feel it moving between us, how it is suddenly bunched and pressing into me in a new place. I try and get out from under him, saying no as many times as I can as my skirt is pulled up over my butt and then my panties are being pulled down. ...

Now you are demanding that the reader imagines that he (mostly) is a young married woman. For a 69 year old male "bear of little brain" like me that is too difficult and I just hit the <BACK> button.

 

[emap]

Snoopy your silly, that wasn't the start of the story, that was a snippet to show how you can have people see his happiness at taking her without doing third person.

Honestly sometimes I gotta wonder about you.

 

[tammytoodles]

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[emap]

Oh no, don't push this off on me, you would be lucky to see the story in 5 years. I'm slow, I also seem to be getting slower, the one I'm working on now may be done this year, probably next honestly.

Thank you for thinking it was awesome.

 

[tammytoodles]

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[emap]

Well kinda embarrassing but sorta three stories. A horror story, a sci fi story and a superhero story. Mostly doing the horror but the other two kinda sneaked out on me.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

What are you working on Emap?

Well kinda embarrassing but sorta three stories. A horror story, a sci fi story and a superhero story. Mostly doing the horror but the other two kinda sneaked out on me.

If you spent more time writing and less time being rude to your "elders and betters" (sic) then we could all read your excellent stories that much sooner.

 

[emap]

Bah, what better? You old slut your older, not better.

Hey hang on, why is everyone saying excellent about my stuff? Are ya'll trying to get my head to swell so big I can't even sit up, or is this a more sinister way to get certain bad mouthing people to take a notice of me to try and get me to leave?

Not gonna work, I know my stuff sucks, I don't get that many votes on any of them, even the one non consent I did. I probably would get a ton for a loving wife story but I'm still puzzling that one.

So nyah nyah I'm not going anywhere and you slutty snoopy are going to get another story to edit sometime in the next two years, maybe three.

 

[tammytoodles]

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[emap]

You really should take a look at my homepage, I already did a non consent story. Eventually I'll make another I suppose, maybe next decade.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... Hey hang on, why is everyone saying excellent about my stuff? ...

I suppose there must be a reason, but I can't imagine what. Somehow it is the adjective which comes to mind ...