First Attempt

[RickOShea]

I've reposted my first story, "What She Wanted," after receiving some excellent help. The story is here:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=361806

I's appreciate comments. "Tough love" is appropriate!

Thanks,

RickOShea

 

[where]

God sorry... can't do incest especially father/daughter ones

 

[The_Fractal_King]

Not bad at all. Your characters are more realistic than often happens on Lit. The father actually having to think about fucking his daughter was a nice touch.

God sorry... can't do incest especially father/daughter ones

Really? That's the best kind XD

 

[drksideofthemoon]

God sorry... can't do incest especially father/daughter ones

Yeah, I'm with Red on this one...sorry...

 

[Guest]

It's definitely not my category of choice, but I have read some father/daughter incest stories.

Aside from some typos (maybe find a proofreader to go with that editor) you did an excellent job overall; this is head and shoulders above other, similar incest stories that I've read.

The only thing that I would have liked to have seen is just a bit more background that would make the entire family's shift to being acceptant of father/mother/daughter incest more plausible. The way you painted the dad showed some of his hesitation, but no agonizing over breaking society's third-worst taboo. The mother appears to be practical to an unnerving degree. The way the girl is drawn is the most understandable.

However, even without the extra background, the story works, and works well. You should be proud.

 

[tickledkitty]

I read part of it. It's not badly written, but it is completely unbelieveable. Sorry.

 

[where]

Really? That's the best kind XD

depends whether you have been on the receiving end or not doesn't it?

 

[The_Fractal_King]

depends whether you have been on the receiving end or not doesn't it?

I would assume more about the experience if it did occur. If I offended you, I do apologize.