a haiku is more than 5-7-5

[AlinaX]

lonely mountain - tears fall like gold
in the dawn of the world

 

[EbersMoll]

The wind whispers past
The bright, enticing, petals,
Carrying invites.

 

[AlinaX]

the tease of cool air
against unguarded petals

 

[AlinaX]

The wind whispers past
The bright, enticing, petals,
Carrying invites.

I actually really like this and the image of petals being carried in the air, each one a drifting echo of some not-so-distant vibrancy.

 

[EbersMoll]

I actually really like this and the image of petals being carried in the air, each one a drifting echo of some not-so-distant vibrancy.

Thank you I was imagining fragrance being carried from the petals on the passing breeze. I’m working on follow-on.

 

[EbersMoll]

Pity the poor fly,
Unconsciously drawn, to the
Fly trap’s sweet centre.

 

[WCSGarland]

Pity the poor fly,
Thinking old man with chopsticks,
Is not a big threat.

 

[EbersMoll]

The silver back male,
Reflects upon those beauties
He lusted after.

 

[42BelowsBack]

Dragon mountain mouth
ice it smokes with cruel fire
mountain water springs

 

[AlinaX]

sunset gold
rings in the belly
of the worm

 

[EbersMoll]

The buttercup leaf
Fills the caterpillar’s gut
With vibrant sunshine.