What is the best way to construct this sentence?

[stickygirl]

Thanks to all. Here's what I'm settling on.

Heat blossomed throughout her body, gathering in delicious intensity in her breasts and sex.

Thanks, in particular, to @RedLantern and @Dreamerman77.

Heat blossomed throughout her body, gathering with delicious intensity in her breasts and sex.

 

[AG31]

Heat blossomed throughout her body, gathering with delicious intensity in her breasts and sex.

Absolutely!!! Thanks. I'll go edit the Writer's notebook thread.

 

[TheLobster]

Well, @AG31, now that you got my ADHD going I’m think about all of the ways replacing “the best” in the sentence below modifies the emotional impact:


Her body blazed with desire, wet, hard, and aching in all the best places.

* the worst
* her favorite
* her most vulnerable
* the usual
* the expected
* the most important
* the most private
* the most ungodly
* the most intimate
* the most shameful
……

“Aching with Desire in All the Wrong Places”