Looking for actual feedback

[GrantBricksly]

So, some of you may know me, and may have even read some of my stories (maybe even the ones I'm about to mention in this post. But, here I am nonetheless.

For those that do not know, I am working on a series (to eventually become a full fledged book) currently titled "The Tales of Shoshana" While my original intent was to write this away from lit, and publish it as a book, I decided to put it here, at least for now, because I wanted to get some feedback.

Because of how long it will end up being in the long run (As of tomorrow morning (8/8/25) 7 Chapters and almost 70k words) I chose to put it in Novels and Novellas. As a result, While I am definitely getting views, I am NOT getting much in the way of feedback. I've gotten a grand total of 2 comments so far (only one of which was really of any use) and not a lot of votes either. Ch 1 has 59 votes, but everything else is sitting around 10-15 or lower.

So, I come to you, in this section of the forums, humbly requesting some feedback, be it good or bad, I simply hope for constructive feedback. I want to know if I am writing a compelling story or not.

Here is a synopsis:

The Tales of Shoshana

Shoshana Leafspire’s journey begins with a hidden door, a whisper of destiny, and the call of her god.
A newly devoted follower of Aaos, she seeks not only to master magic, but to prepare for the day she will search the world for Him—and the lost relics of His faith. Guided by the immortal mage Dak Helranth, Shana’s training sharpens her command of magic, and the subtle weavings of power, all in service of her greater quest.
Her nights, however, belong to seduction—where the warmth of friendship with Rae, a captivating dancer, and Nin, a steadfast blacksmith, deepens into passion.

Any feedback would be awesome, whether in the form of an email, comment here, or comments/votes on the story.

 

[Gamblnluck]

Just from the excerpt, I can tell you are not going to have the readership you want in Novels. For one, it is has few views. You need somebody into that fantasy stuff. When you start using other world names, and fantasy jargon,you have limited your readership down to those who like that stuff.
You might get a better readership in sci-fi where those people read.
I'd bet many of the views you got were simple clicks to see what the story was about, but they didn't read it.

 

[GrantBricksly]

Just from the excerpt, I can tell you are not going to have the readership you want in Novels. For one, it is has few views. You need somebody into that fantasy stuff. When you start using other world names, and fantasy jargon,you have limited your readership down to those who like that stuff.
You might get a better readership in sci-fi where those people read.
I'd bet many of the views you got were simple clicks to see what the story was about, but they didn't read it.

Yeah..I kind of figured I shot myself in the foot using that category. With the size of the story, I thought it was the best option...but now... Chapter 1 has a decent amount of views...and more votes than I anticipated...so that's something...