Please help me write better

[PlowThrough]

Hello everyone,

Could someone kindly go through my submissions and tell me what I can do to write better stories?

Thanks

 

[lovecraft68]

Link something in the feedback forum and people will take a look

 

[Five_Inch_Heels]

Sort of what this is for:

https://forum.literotica.com/forums/story-feedback.1/

 

[TheLobster]

Add to your forum signature a link to your profile page. It will make it easier for people here to find your stories.

 

[StillStunned]

Teach yourself to be a better writer:

A place to discuss the craft of writing: tricks, philosophies, styles
Self-editing for authors

My recommendation is that you find a book or story whose style you admire and you want to emulate, and set it alongside your own writing. See what it is you like, and how it's different from what you've written. Then see if you can achieve the same effect.

 

[WaxPhilosophic]

Just took a quick look at "Whose House".

There is a beauty in monotony, especially after a very wild ride. Monotony is like a lighthouse in the rough seas, that gives us hope that there is a shore, there is normalcy. The rhythmic humming of the ceiling fan gave Geetha this comfort.

The first few lines are f-ing brilliant. Absolutely loved it.

What can make it better?

After that spectacular intro, you dive right into doling out facts, like heights, ages, cup sizes. This is what a lot of "writing howto" sites call an info dump. Try giving us things more slowly or implying them. How about: "Geetha towered over Jyothi, just like she towered over her husband..." You can let us know she's taller than average without coming right out and giving us measurements.

You may also want to break up your paragraphs, keeping them shorter. It's said this makes stories less intimidating to read.

And make it a lesbian story with Geetha and Jyothi and kick the boys to the curb. But that's just me.

 

[iwatchus]

Link something in the feedback forum and people will take a look

Thank you and @Five_Inch_Heels for this. I had no idea that part of the forum even existed.

 

[PlowThrough]

Just took a quick look at "Whose House".


The first few lines are f-ing brilliant. Absolutely loved it.

What can make it better?

After that spectacular intro, you dive right into doling out facts, like heights, ages, cup sizes. This is what a lot of "writing howto" sites call an info dump. Try giving us things more slowly or implying them. How about: "Geetha towered over Jyothi, just like she towered over her husband..." You can let us know she's taller than average without coming right out and giving us measurements.

You may also want to break up your paragraphs, keeping them shorter. It's said this makes stories less intimidating to read.

And make it a lesbian story with Geetha and Jyothi and kick the boys to the curb. But that's just me.

Awesome, I loved that info dump byte. Thank you!

 

[PlowThrough]

Add to your forum signature a link to your profile page. It will make it easier for people here to find your stories.

Makes sense. Thanks, this was my first forum post. I will get better at this.