Review What I Have So Far

[MineCraft040521]

Hello everyone! So, I've been writing this story over the last week and a half or so, and I was interested in getting some outside thoughts on it so far. The basic plot of it is that Kamala Harris’s stepdaughter, Ella Emhoff, is dating a conservative guy. The twist is that she doesn’t know that he’s conservative. He’s pretending to be a liberal so that he can try and seduce her MILF mom, Kamala. This plot is probably not for everyone, but to those who are interested, below are the first 5,800 words.

NOTE: This is all buildup, and I have not gotten to the sex yet. Am I taking too long, or does the buildup make it hotter? Let me know! There may also be spelling and grammar errors. Let me know about those, too. You can either respond here or leave comments on the document; either is fine with me.

Removed per guidelines

 

[PennyThompson]

Generally the mods don't like people posting more than a couple of paragraphs of a work on the forum like that, because it's often seen as an attempt to bypass the normal story moderation system.

Also, I'm pretty sure a story like this would violate Lit's content guidelines, which don't allow "Works that promote or focus heavily on politics or religion, or political or religious figures."

 

[MineCraft040521]

I've seen stories posted before that deal with political figures, two that specifically deal with Sarah Palin, so not sure why those would be allowed and mine wouldn't.

 

[ElectricBlue]

I've seen stories posted before that deal with political figures, two that specifically deal with Sarah Palin, so not sure why those would be allowed and mine wouldn't.

The site responds to the political climate - those stories might have been from a quieter time.

 

[StillStunned]

I've seen stories posted before that deal with political figures, two that specifically deal with Sarah Palin, so not sure why those would be allowed and mine wouldn't.

The site isn't always consistent, and sometimes things slip through. "But someone else got away with it!" isn't really an effective argument.

 

[MineCraft040521]

The site responds to the political climate - those stories might have been from a quieter time.

Makes sense, the political world has never been as crazy as it is now.

The site isn't always consistent, and sometimes things slip through. "But someone else got away with it!" isn't really an effective argument.

That also makes sense, and I wasn't really trying to argue that I should be allowed to post, too. I was just confused why it's still up if it breaks the rules.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Makes sense, the political world has never been as crazy as it is now.

That also makes sense, and I wasn't really trying to argue that I should be allowed to post, too. I was just confused why it's still up if it breaks the rules.

Probably because no-one has reported it. If a story gets reported it gets reviewed by the site and either given a pass, or gets rejected and sent back to the author. If the author does nothing to fix the content, the story stays down forever.

 

[MineCraft040521]

Probably because no-one has reported it. If a story gets reported it gets reviewed by the site and either given a pass, or gets rejected and sent back to the author. If the author does nothing to fix the content, the story stays down forever.

Gotcha, thanks for the info, I'll keep that in mind.

 

[VerbalAbuse]

so, he fucks the older woman in the ass? then straight to face?

 

[MineCraft040521]

so, he fucks the older woman in the ass? then straight to face?

Well, I haven't gotten to the sex yet, so I don't know how it'll go.