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[jaxjack1980]

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[kitmarlowe]

What help are you hoping to get from someone simply writing the scene for you?

Read a lot, figure out what you do and don't like, and then try to emulate it in your own work. That's the only way to improve.

 

[jaxjack1980]

Yeah, if I wasn't clear I was looking for someone to write the scene described above.

 

[jaxjack1980]

Looking for good examples to see how it's properly done. You do what works for you but this is what I'm trying out.

 

[kitmarlowe]

Yeah, if I wasn't clear I was looking for someone to write the scene described above.

Yeah, I got that. How do you think this is going to help your own writing?

 

[jaxjack1980]

I know what works for me and you can agree or not. Not that different than finding and reading other stories, just trying to cut some of the work. Yeah, agree writing scenes work best and I'll continue doing that but seeking motivation directly. You can disagree with what I'm doing but that's what I'm doing.

 

[jaxjack1980]

More than one way of tackling a problem and to each their own.

 

[kitmarlowe]

Well, good luck I guess. I'm not sure you're going to convince anyone to write two custom scenes for you for free but maybe someone will prove me wrong.

 

[PennyThompson]

There are writers here who will write on commission if you're willing to pay! (Not me, to be clear)

 

[lovecraft68]

Not a whole scene, but an excerpt that might help. This is a story of a young woman with limited sexual experience trying her hand at the escort game. Prior to her first encounter she watched a how to give a BJ video given by Molly Minx, a porn star I featured in another story.

On the final trip along his cock, Brooke took his tip into her mouth and teased her tongue beneath the sensitive ridge beneath it. Bill squirmed in the chair, showing another pointer from the video had paid off.

Brooke released his tip and parting her lips, let a long strand of spit flow from her lips and onto his head. He moaned loudly, when she slid her hand up and slid her palm over his head before rapidly stroking him, her spit making his cock slick and allowing her hand to smoothly glide along his cock.

She continued to stroke as she pushed it back and this time spit directly onto his balls. Brooke quickly swirled her tongue over it, working her saliva into his tight sac, then noisily slurping it up.

“If you’re new, you’re a quick learner,” Bill joked, but she could hear the breathy tremor in his voice as she bathed his balls with her swiftly moving tongue. She took a moment to gently suck on each of them while slowing her stroking so he wouldn’t think she was trying to cheat him and get him off with her hand.

“Never forget about the balls,” Molly spoke in her mind. “Lot of women do, so go the extra mile to make your man happy.”

Bill seemed happy as he moaned quietly, and his fingers tightened in her hair while she now opened wide and managed to suck his entire sac into her mouth. He groaned in appreciation as she sucked on him before letting his balls fall from her mouth and ran her tongue up his length.

This time when she got to the top, she slid her lips over his head and took him into her mouth.

“Oh, that’s it,” Bill sighed while Brooke bobbed her head in a steady rhythm.

She worked him with her mouth, taking about half his length each time and moaned while making eye contact with him.

She took him deeper and widened her eyes before rolling them back, now whimpering as she blew him. It wasn’t all for show. Unlike Steve, Brooke wanted to make Bill happy.

He was excited to see her, friendly, and most importantly he’d been polite and respectful to her. The fact he was paying her didn’t hurt and also added to her growing pleasure.

Brooke placed her hands on his thighs, so she was now only using her mouth and changed her motion, now after moving downward, she moved forward on the way up, then back, better massaging him with her mouth while keeping her tongue pressed to his shaft.

“Good girl,” he breathed, his free hand caressing her shoulder, then sliding behind her, to run under her hair and along the smooth skin of her back.

Brooke took him deeper, releasing a choking sound when his head hit the back of her throat. She’d gone as far as she could, and he didn’t seem to mind, but she was here to please and wanted to prove that if she were going to do this, then she was going to do it right.

Remembering the video, she lifted her tongue, gliding it along his shaft, relaxed her throat, angled her head slightly and taking a breath, inhaled him into her throat, slipping him past her gag reflex.

Brooke felt a twisted surge of triumph as she now had her lips around the base of his shaft and held him deep in her throat.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

More than one way of tackling a problem and to each their own.

Here's a link to literally thousands and thousands of examples of what you're looking for. You'll have to do a little digging, but I think you'll find it worth the effort.

 

[kitmarlowe]

Not a whole scene, but an excerpt that might help. This is a story of a young woman with limited sexual experience trying her hand at the escort game. Prior to her first encounter she watched a how to give a BJ video given by Molly Minx, a porn star I featured in another story.

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Is this from one of your stories? Drop the link!

 

[lovecraft68]

Is this from one of your stories? Drop the link!

It's from a piece I published for sale.

 

[lovecraft68]

Here's a link to literally thousands and thousands of examples of what you're looking for. You'll have to do a little digging, but I think you'll find it worth the effort.

Good to see you narrowed it down.

 

[kitmarlowe]

It's from a piece I published for sale.

I don't know if I'm breaking rules if I ask for the title. I assume asking for a link off-site is verboten. Which is a shame because I'd love to read it.

 

[jaxjack1980]

Appreciate the link ShelbyDawn57! And a special thanks to lovecraft68 for providing something from your own work!

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Good to see you narrowed it down.

Just trying to help.

 

[ElectricBlue]

I know what works for me and you can agree or not. Not that different than finding and reading other stories, just trying to cut some of the work. Yeah, agree writing scenes work best and I'll continue doing that but seeking motivation directly. You can disagree with what I'm doing but that's what I'm doing.

Writing is a bit of work. Read some stories for ideas, but write your own content. Good luck trying to find someone to do your writing for you.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Appreciate the link ShelbyDawn57! And a special thanks to lovecraft68 for providing something from your own work!

have to admit I was being a bit sarcastic, but the truth is, there are lots of excellent writers on this forum. Reading what you want to write is critical to any writers success. That's how you see what works and what doesn't. I subscribe to Master Class and watch all kinds of tutorials on writing from some of the true greats. One thing they seem to have in common is the importance of READING. Good luck.

 

[lovecraft68]

have to admit I was being a bit sarcastic, but the truth is, there are lots of excellent writers on this forum. Reading what you want to write is critical to any writers success. That's how you see what works and what doesn't. I subscribe to Master Class and watch all kinds of tutorials on writing from some of the true greats. One thing they seem to have in common is the importance of READING. Good luck.

I keep saying I'm going to sign up for the Alan Moore Masterclass but haven't done it yet. Not so much to help with any smut writing, but my horror novels.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

I keep saying I'm going to sign up for the Alan Moore Masterclass but haven't done it yet. Not so much to help with any smut writing, but my horror novels.

I highly suggest signing up for the service.

 

[jaxjack1980]

have to admit I was being a bit sarcastic, but the truth is, there are lots of excellent writers on this forum. Reading what you want to write is critical to any writers success. That's how you see what works and what doesn't. I subscribe to Master Class and watch all kinds of tutorials on writing from some of the true greats. One thing they seem to have in common is the importance of READING. Good luck.

Well, I'll take any piece of advice, no matter the intent, and see what results may come. Agree reading and writing more help sharpen skills.