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First of all, the site frowns on people posting entire stories in forum threads. It's too easy to circumvent the story rules. These posts are going to be deleted, so if I were you I'd make sure you have a backup.

Second, your paragraphs are walls of text. I'm seeing them on my laptop and I'm already noping out. Imagine what it's like for someone who's reading on their phone - and from what I gather that's the majority of Lit readers and posters. My rule of thumb is to limit paragraphs to 60-90 words.

Third, why don't you just submit this as a story on the story side?
 
First of all, the site frowns on people posting entire stories in forum threads. It's too easy to circumvent the story rules. These posts are going to be deleted, so if I were you I'd make sure you have a backup.

Second, your paragraphs are walls of text. I'm seeing them on my laptop and I'm already noping out. Imagine what it's like for someone who's reading on their phone - and from what I gather that's the majority of Lit readers and posters. My rule of thumb is to limit paragraphs to 60-90 words.

Third, why don't you just submit this as a story on the story side?
I'm a little disappointed there wasn't a fourth paragraph...

"Sorry sir, the story side is over there. Moose out front should have told you so."
 
...but you are not a Jedi yet.
Hey folks, I hate to disappoint all you creative spirits, especially @jake_smith32, but this novel has already been written, by none other than the great Andy Warhol:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A,_A_Novel

TL;DR: Andy and a friend are followed all over NYC, talking endlessly about everything, while people follow them with tape recorders. A is the transcript. @gunhilltrain, there's a bit in A where they discuss doing a second book, called-- you guessed it-- B.

For writers this is actually quite interesting and valuable. If you want to get a feel for real dialogue, just read a few pages.
 
Hey folks, I hate to disappoint all you creative spirits, especially @jake_smith32, but this novel has already been written, by none other than the great Andy Warhol:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A,_A_Novel

TL;DR: Andy and a friend are followed all over NYC, talking endlessly about everything, while people follow them with tape recorders. A is the transcript. @gunhilltrain, there's a bit in A where they discuss doing a second book, called-- you guessed it-- B.

For writers this is actually quite interesting and valuable. If you want to get a feel for real dialogue, just read a few pages.

The Wikipedia Article linked in the post said:
Warhol wanted to write a "bad" novel, "because doing something the wrong way always opens doors"

Oh God, that already brings me back to something I wish I watched before I killed my momentum last year.

 
Oh God, that already brings me back to something I wish I watched before I killed my momentum last year.


"Doing something the wrong way always opens up doors." Seems like we have a whole political philosophy based on that now.
 
It’s way funnier that somebody came on here just to say, “a” than anything anyone else can comment.
 
It’s way funnier that somebody came on here just to say, “a” than anything anyone else can comment.
It’d indeed be way funnier — if it actually happened.

The first few posts make it pretty clear that what actually did happen was that OP had dumped an entire story in a thread rather than submitting it through regular channels and this ‘a’ is his attempt to rectify the blunder.
 
It’d indeed be way funnier — if it actually happened.

The first few posts make it pretty clear that what actually did happen was that OP had dumped an entire story in a thread rather than submitting it through regular channels and this ‘a’ is his attempt to rectify the blunder.
That makes it better imo 💀
 
I'm a little disappointed there wasn't a fourth paragraph...

"Sorry sir, the story side is over there. Moose out front should have told you so."
It was the OP's first and second posts. I was trying to be helpful and friendly. Sarcasm doesn't kick in until someone's tenth post. By then they should know better.
 
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