a

[jake_smith32]

a

 

[StillStunned]

First of all, the site frowns on people posting entire stories in forum threads. It's too easy to circumvent the story rules. These posts are going to be deleted, so if I were you I'd make sure you have a backup.

Second, your paragraphs are walls of text. I'm seeing them on my laptop and I'm already noping out. Imagine what it's like for someone who's reading on their phone - and from what I gather that's the majority of Lit readers and posters. My rule of thumb is to limit paragraphs to 60-90 words.

Third, why don't you just submit this as a story on the story side?

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

And BOOM!!!

 

[TheLobster]

Six minutes between the thread being posted and @StillStunned adding his three paragraph reply.

Impressive, most impressive...

 

[stickygirl]

a

Well, it's a start

 

[StillStunned]

Six minutes between the thread being posted and @StillStunned adding his three paragraph reply.

Impressive, most impressive...

I made time especially in my busy Friday night, being-totally-cool-and-having-an-exciting-social-life schedule to reply.

 

[KittyOfSteele]

Six minutes between the thread being posted and @StillStunned adding his three paragraph reply.

Impressive, most impressive...

You missed the chance to say that you're still stunned by his skill.

 

[gunhilltrain]

a

Jake, you've been here four years and you've finally invented a new artistic movement: super-minimalism. My I suggest the second chapter:

b

 

[PapaRomantic]

First of all, the site frowns on people posting entire stories in forum threads. It's too easy to circumvent the story rules. These posts are going to be deleted, so if I were you I'd make sure you have a backup.

Second, your paragraphs are walls of text. I'm seeing them on my laptop and I'm already noping out. Imagine what it's like for someone who's reading on their phone - and from what I gather that's the majority of Lit readers and posters. My rule of thumb is to limit paragraphs to 60-90 words.

Third, why don't you just submit this as a story on the story side?

I'm a little disappointed there wasn't a fourth paragraph...

"Sorry sir, the story side is over there. Moose out front should have told you so."

 

[Belegon]

Impressive, most impressive...

...but you are not a Jedi yet.

 

[VallesMarineris]

...but you are not a Jedi yet.

Hey folks, I hate to disappoint all you creative spirits, especially @jake_smith32, but this novel has already been written, by none other than the great Andy Warhol:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A,_A_Novel

TL;DR: Andy and a friend are followed all over NYC, talking endlessly about everything, while people follow them with tape recorders. A is the transcript. @gunhilltrain, there's a bit in A where they discuss doing a second book, called-- you guessed it-- B.

For writers this is actually quite interesting and valuable. If you want to get a feel for real dialogue, just read a few pages.

 

[KittyOfSteele]

Hey folks, I hate to disappoint all you creative spirits, especially @jake_smith32, but this novel has already been written, by none other than the great Andy Warhol:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A,_A_Novel

TL;DR: Andy and a friend are followed all over NYC, talking endlessly about everything, while people follow them with tape recorders. A is the transcript. @gunhilltrain, there's a bit in A where they discuss doing a second book, called-- you guessed it-- B.

For writers this is actually quite interesting and valuable. If you want to get a feel for real dialogue, just read a few pages.

Warhol wanted to write a "bad" novel, "because doing something the wrong way always opens doors"

Oh God, that already brings me back to something I wish I watched before I killed my momentum last year.

 

[SinclairGroupLLP]

c

 

[Lifestyle66]

a

It reads like a great stroker story for those who cum too fast.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

zed

 

[WCSGarland]

a2z

 

[gunhilltrain]

Oh God, that already brings me back to something I wish I watched before I killed my momentum last year.

"Doing something the wrong way always opens up doors." Seems like we have a whole political philosophy based on that now.

 

[WCSGarland]

"Doing something the wrong way always opens up doors."

I would bet that 9 times out of 10, those doors also have signs that read "EXIT"

 

[Cacatua_Galerita]

b

2B ∥ ¬2B i.e. Ћ ?

 

[gunhilltrain]

Oh God, that already brings me back to something I wish I watched before I killed my momentum last year.

Fucking up is the default human operating mode. Perfection requires some effort.

 

[MrPixel]

zed

Damn spoiler.

 

[madelinemasoch]

It’s way funnier that somebody came on here just to say, “a” than anything anyone else can comment.

 

[TheLobster]

It’s way funnier that somebody came on here just to say, “a” than anything anyone else can comment.

It’d indeed be way funnier — if it actually happened.

The first few posts make it pretty clear that what actually did happen was that OP had dumped an entire story in a thread rather than submitting it through regular channels and this ‘a’ is his attempt to rectify the blunder.

 

[madelinemasoch]

It’d indeed be way funnier — if it actually happened.

The first few posts make it pretty clear that what actually did happen was that OP had dumped an entire story in a thread rather than submitting it through regular channels and this ‘a’ is his attempt to rectify the blunder.

That makes it better imo

 

[StillStunned]

I'm a little disappointed there wasn't a fourth paragraph...

"Sorry sir, the story side is over there. Moose out front should have told you so."

It was the OP's first and second posts. I was trying to be helpful and friendly. Sarcasm doesn't kick in until someone's tenth post. By then they should know better.