HarryHill
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never mind
lol tess
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never mind
lol tess
Great narration. I just have read this poem again. Very nice. Very nice composition--iteration. It's about everyday life, prosaic, while the poem creates transcendental mood. Thus, after all, this poem is in minor key, a bit sad.Look, this Stardust is the very first submission under DaddysTastyTreat, and it's fun!
Both Dem's poems posted today are worth a dekko for the sarcastic , satiric look @ corporate greed in one & the sense of yearning hope in the other .....
By Demure101? -- Neither is original, and both are banal (trivial--these two unfortunate features go hand in hand).I second. I didn't have time to leave comments but they are both very good ink!
I recommend a dekko @ Pel's On Free Markets if only for the controversuies it's managed to generate in the PFD threads !
Also Nice Miss Price for erotica .
Poem
by Ashesh9 is pleasant to read but a bit thin. The premise of gaining your personal freedom by letting go of your ego is of course very old, this is the very basic departure point of poetry--of old Chinese poetry, of haiku, etc. Perhaps this poem can be used as repeated refrain, and pelegrino may assist you, Ashesh, in writing stanzas around this refrain.
PS. Ashesh, look at these links! and make them like this yourself.
PPS. Can some natives check in detail on the given poem? If anything then it should be easy to fix.
I recommend Okudzhava by Senna J ( still can't elegantly post 'em links Senna , humble apologies) about a Russian Poet : if you google his unpronounceable name you can find links to his Poetry on Google , Wikipedia etc. he was a popular Russian language poet who was & is still well loved in Russia , Poland & the Chech Republic . His father was arrested & shot dead by KGB on trumped up charges of being a Third Reich spy & even his mother was imprisoned in the infamous Gulag .
Reading his poetry i was astonished at his literary talent & am thankful to Senna for havin' brought him to Lit !
https://www.literotica.com/p/snakebit By AMovaeblebeast
Read comment, it's an interesting and wild ride