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Old 02-14-2014, 03:54 PM   #1
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words to avoid in erotic poetry

oh come on, y'all know there are words that make you wince when reading a piece of erotic poetry (or prose, for that matter). sure, there're always exceptions to the rule, but there's nothing kills the erotic buzz faster than the words you'll see here!

help me compile a handy list of no-no's for all and sundry to refer to when struggling to remain fresh, anti-cliché, and to avoid passion-killers.

nectar - innoccuous enough but more clichéd than 'at the end of the day'
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Old 02-14-2014, 04:59 PM   #2
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oh come on, y'all know there are words that make you wince when reading a piece of erotic poetry (or prose, for that matter). sure, there're always exceptions to the rule, but there's nothing kills the erotic buzz faster than the words you'll see here!

help me compile a handy list of no-no's for all and sundry to refer to when struggling to remain fresh, anti-cliché, and to avoid passion-killers.

nectar - innoccuous enough but more clichéd than 'at the end of the day'
manhood - Used as a word substitute for penis rather than an age/gender descriptor.
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Old 02-14-2014, 05:04 PM   #3
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Stinky twat would probably make me take pause. As would cheesy foreskin.
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Old 02-14-2014, 05:11 PM   #5
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{this thread needs a gag-emote . . . as in a fingers down throat jobbie, not the kind some of you enjoy nor a comedic reference }
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Old 02-14-2014, 05:46 PM   #6
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oh come on, y'all know there are words that make you wince when reading a piece of erotic poetry (or prose, for that matter). sure, there're always exceptions to the rule, but there's nothing kills the erotic buzz faster than the words you'll see here!

help me compile a handy list of no-no's for all and sundry to refer to when struggling to remain fresh, anti-cliché, and to avoid passion-killers.

nectar - innoccuous enough but more clichéd than 'at the end of the day'
Ah crap ....... I just posted one today with nectar in it.
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Old 02-14-2014, 05:58 PM   #7
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Ah crap ....... I just posted one today with nectar in it.
we've all been there - well, most of us. which is exactly the problem. what might have worked well when unusual to the reader, now cloys when we read it over and over and over. one's brain starts its own sub-commentary even as it's reading on. cliches are distracting!
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Old 02-14-2014, 06:11 PM   #8
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Old 02-14-2014, 06:26 PM   #9
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Hm. Are cliches really so bad?
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Old 02-14-2014, 06:47 PM   #10
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Hm. Are cliches really so bad?
They are when they become hackneyed and the readers groans and thinks 'Couldn't you at least have looked for some originality'.
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They are when they become hackneyed and the readers groans and thinks 'Couldn't you at least have looked for some originality'.
I find that this rings true with insults as well. I cringe whenever I hear someone call someone else a "piece of shit". Even in my greatest fits of anger, I would never go there.
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Old 02-14-2014, 08:08 PM   #12
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Jizzem

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when there are enough words here I think I might try to write something that incorporates them all
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Old 02-15-2014, 12:48 AM   #14
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when there are enough words here I think I might try to write something that incorporates them all
Well you've got one line 'I shoot my jizzem in your rosebud then wipe it with a flannel'
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Old 02-15-2014, 12:51 AM   #15
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Well you've got one line 'I shoot my jizzem in your rosebud then wipe it with a flannel'
not quite an American sentence
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for the record :-)

This topic of coming up (forget puns, please) with outrageous words is simply fun.

Let's just mention that words in porn poems are problematic only in 99% of cases, and it's not due to the words as such but because of the way they are used. Statistically yes--you have a 99% of a chance that when seeing a graphic word the poem is useless (poetically ).

The real problem is that the porn poems are simply worthless in 99% of the cases, period.
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when there are enough words here I think I might try to write something that incorporates them all
That sounds awesome. I want in on that thread.
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The "c" word (can't bring myself to say it. That's how much I dislike it.) unless the context removes it from deprecating a woman.
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Old 02-15-2014, 01:30 PM   #20
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But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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Old 02-15-2014, 03:00 PM   #21
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That sounds awesome. I want in on that thread.
it's workable

i once wrote something using as many clichés as possible but with panache
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Old 02-15-2014, 03:23 PM   #22
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The "c" word (can't bring myself to say it. That's how much I dislike it.) unless the context removes it from deprecating a woman.
I so agree! Even used in a pseudo friendly way (as is the case of the General Board) it gets my back up. I suspect it is used for shock value. It's an ugly word too often used in an ugly way. D. H. used it well, almost making it beautiful but I can't think of many others.
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I so agree! Even used in a pseudo friendly way (as is the case of the General Board) it gets my back up. I suspect it is used for shock value. It's an ugly word too often used in an ugly way. D. H. used it well, almost making it beautiful but I can't think of many others.
as always, i feel this depends so much on the intent of the user as to how the reader should choose to react. as an insult, then it is an ugly term, denigrating something lovely to something of little or no value, something to be despised. it's an effective oath, since it evokes anger and resentment - when used with enough invective. as a throwaway, it is less than the air used to expel it.

as an honest cherishing of a woman's sex in good old anglo saxon, then i read no harm. it's overused by brits in most cases, but less for shock-value (imo) than wry humour.
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