Demon Pi

Good evening, guys and gals.

I hope everything is set to have a great weekend.

I've been working on Demon Pi for quite a while now, going back to part one here http://www.literotica.com/s/the-devils-number. I've gotten a few fine bits of feedback and some good comments, but as I've picked it back up after a long stretch I'd love to get some more. I want it to be a damn fun story for people to read, so the more constructive feedback, the better!

Again that's
The Devil's Number, Demon Pi Part 1 (it's up to part 16)
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-devils-number
Humor and Satire

I look forward to browsing this forum myself and trying to give some feedback on others too.

Thanks,
Zack

Wow, and over 10k views for the first part of Demon Pi. Thanks folks! Likewise thanks for the good private feedback. Totally appreciated.

2nd paragraph ". . . action of a man once he gained left home."
You need to edit and proofread and ask for input BEFORE you publish.

Well thank you for the feedback, it is appreciated. Alas as with any amatuer writing sometimes things do get missed on read throughs. Again, thanks.