I started with "Mom Becoming a Model Ch. 01" and discovered that that isn't the beginning of the story. I eventually figured out that your story starts with "Visiting Mom at Work". I started that, saw that it begin with a large block of "she's so hot, blah, blah, blah" narrative summery and then skimmed down to where the dialogue began. Your story had two lines of dialogue - way, way too little.