Your opinion?

[brghostwriter]

Hi, all!

I'm brazilian, and I've tried to write my first story in english. In fact, that's a translation from an original story I wrote in portuguese.

My english is not that good, then unfortunately I couldn't write the story exactly the way I want to. Then, I'm asking you to tell me what you think about it. Feel free to correct any grammar error too.

The story is at:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=42232

Thank you very much!

 

[Debbie]

I liked your story. The translation is quite good but
there would be a great improvement if the grammer
was corrected.
Asking one of the volunteer editors at Lit to look
at it and correct the grammer is a good idea.