Your best lines

[ThisNameIsntTakenYet]

This thread was inspired by TarnishedPenny's Best. Line. Ever. thread.

Where that thread was about quoting books, here I'm wondering that the best lines are that YOU have ever written. What part of your writing are you most proud of? It could be a poetic masterpiece, a funny bit of dialogue or narration, or even just the best description you have ever written. Don't be shy and show it off to the world (or the AH, at least). Include the name of the story too, if you have already published it on here.

I'll start, with a description from my Nude Day story Undress to Impress that I'm particularly proud of:

The blonde was lying on her side, gracefully propped up on an elbow with her hand supporting her head. The moonlight seeping through the open window accentuated the otherwise modest curves of her toned body. In the pale light, she reminded Laura of a marble statue, finely carved in a seductive pose.​

 

[SimonDoom]

I liked these two lines I wrote for my story BTB, Incorporated:


My respect for him, low already, disappeared like steam over bad coffee.


He'd known what was coming, and he'd had three days to prepare for it, and still he shook like a baby in the hands of a psychotic day care provider.

 

[MelissaBaby]

I wouldn't say it's my best line, but I am inordinately fond of this one.

I was giving Nicky road head on the freeway when, just over the Rhode Island line, he turned onto an exit ramp going much too fast, sped down the street into a shopping center parking lot, doughnutted to a screeching stop and came in my mouth.

I actually think the best line I have written hasn't been published yet, as it is in the concluding chapter of Mary and Alvin.

I don't believe I've published anything I think is better than this line, from the conclusion of My Fall and Rise.

I sat for a long time and watched, as the sun sparkled through the trees and then rose to illuminate the houses and the cars, the lawns and the flowerbeds, and the world filled with color.

 

[MelissaBaby]

My respect for him, low already, disappeared like steam over bad coffee.


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The "bad" turns a double into a homerun.

 

[rebel_code]

Best? I don't know, but here's one I'm rather proud of. It's from "The Chaser and the Chased", a story that I was pleased with but didn't get a lot of views.

Spent, I fell forward onto the bed, taking Denise with me. We tangled together haphazardly, naked, and she laughed like a child who had just seen the bowling pins fly from her ball.

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-chaser-and-the-chased

And this one, from my latest, "High Tide":

I cautiously cracked the door and looked out. A vast plain of foaming sea was retreating toward what was supposed to be the tide line. The reflection of the full moon danced, crazily distorted, over its turbulent surface.

https://www.literotica.com/s/high-tide-6

 

[BiscuitHammer]

"What the shit?! I thought this thing breathed fire!"

- Jeanie

 

[8letters]

Where that thread was about quoting books, here I'm wondering that the best lines are that YOU have ever written. What part of your writing are you most proud of? It could be a poetic masterpiece, a funny bit of dialogue or narration, or even just the best description you have ever written. Don't be shy and show it off to the world (or the AH, at least). Include the name of the story too, if you have already published it on here.

My favorite line of dialogue I've ever written is, “You obviously know nothing about being Irish.” It'd take a huge amount of explanation as to why that line works. And when I looked up that line, in turns out that I cut it out of "My European Summer Vacation" in one of the later edits.

 

[blozo]

"For want of a better word, she's a bitch!"
Dr. Wright looked over her bifocals at him. While it was not the term she'd have chosen, she could not say his assessment was inaccurate.

From "The Babymaker of Springwood"

 

[ElectricBlue]

"They say the most beautiful part of a geisha is the back of her neck, and that is why there's no make-up there. Adam knew that was wrong - this girl's triangle of skin, dark and brief and just above her hip, was her most beautiful place, her flat belly a promise beyond.

"She glanced across at Adam, and saw the line of his gaze. She reached a little higher."


https://www.literotica.com/s/the-floating-world-1

(My other darlings will get jealous. Now I'm in trouble, a woman scorned and all that).

 

[Hypoxia]

ALL my prose is immortal. Some is just more immortal than other bits, I forget which. Maybe something about the siblings transformed into banana slugs.

 

[LexxRuthless]

I felt like I needed some context to set this up:

Katie's thigh finally brushed against my erection, and she froze.

"Sorry," she whispered. "Is that your dick?"

I couldn't help it. "Nah," I whispered, "I always stash a little summer sausage in there in case I get hungry in the middle of the night."

"Shhh!" she whispered, although she was the one who was laughing. Her thigh rubbed deliciously against the bulge in my underwear.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

I felt one of his hands leave my bum and glide up over my hip and waist to cuddle a breast. I became aware of a tautness in my groin, a glowing in my nipples before a thumb began to roll and play with one. How I loved this man! The fact that 20 total strangers were watching suddenly meant nothing.

For Your Dining Pleasure


And, if I am allowed a Second Place:

The balloon took off like a homesick angel. I watched it carry away my clothes and car key with it, leaving me stark-naked on the ground below.

Up, Down and Away!

 

[PoisonPen33]

"No shit," Brenda answered with more anger than she intended. "Seriously, Anne Jackson? Her legs are harder to close than the JonBenet Ramsey case!"

 

[Desiremakesmeweak]

Mr Burns from Homer Simpson, hires a thousand monkeys to type and write a great novel (I actually don't know exactly HOW many monkeys, but it was a lot...).

After awhile, one monkey types:

"It was the best of times..."

Burns (breathlessly): "Yes, yes -!!"

"It was the blurst of times."

Burns: "Blurst of times! Blurst of times! Whaaaaaaa-tt?!!! You stupid monkeys!"

(LOL - I don't have any 'best lines' of my own).

 

[bushyTrail]

Mr Burns from Homer Simpson, hires a thousand monkeys to type and write a great novel (I actually don't know exactly HOW many monkeys, but it was a lot...).

After awhile, one monkey types:

"It was the best of times..."

Burns (breathlessly): "Yes, yes -!!"

"It was the blurst of times."

Burns: "Blurst of times! Blurst of times! Whaaaaaaa-tt?!!! You stupid monkeys!"

(LOL - I don't have any 'best lines' of my own).

Love that too!
Anyhow, I'm not sure which of my lines I prefer, probably some in my own language, but I love wordplays and I'm particularly fond of the ones for the names of the ponygirls at the beginning of a chapter of my first work in here!
To quote a famous writer, Snoopy from Peanuts, "I don't know about the story, but the characters' names are great!".

 

[Rustyoznail]

Well, I only have a couple of stories up. I’m working on one which I think is a big improvement over the others. These are my best so far. (I think...)

Cathy took a deep breath. Seven. She was used by seven guys in one go. A random thought about dwarves flicked through her mind. “Hi Whore!” She crushed it. Virgin one day, Fuckhead’s cum bucket the next.

Obliquely fitting a Disney reference in, totally by accident

And my best penguin related line -

Damo shook his head, but the loud throbbing noise didn’t go away. Blood was slowly flowing down his face. He could taste it as he involuntarily licked his lips, terrified of what Cath would do to him next. She hit hard. He managed to stand and inched his way towards the door. A large mass of rage slid sideways, blocking him in. He felt like a penguin again.

 

[Maeven_quinn]

I had compliments on this line:

A bump and the prattle of pebbles against the side of the van told us all that we had gone off the road.

https://www.literotica.com/s/enslaved-to-the-sororitys-demon?page=2