Yay!

[GinaTina]

My first story actually got approved first try! Go me!

Feel free to give it a read and gimme some feedback. Critiques are entirely welcome.

Please and thanks!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=499882

 

[GinaTina]

Second day up and already have several people who faved it. AND I got some responses too!

Holy friggin hell, Batman! I've never gotten comments before!!



Second chapter in the works! Go give it a read!



- Quick synopsis: Non-human, possible non-consent - not sure where it's going at the moment.

Sisters are taken captive by two sinister beings for unknown reasons (so far).

Any and all feedback is appreciated. Even if it's unkind. I'm a big girl, I can take it.

Also, a muse would be nice. Sometimes I get stuck and am unsure how to continue. When this happens, my stories tend to come to a stand-still and I lose interest.

I prefer in depth, well-written stories that take a certain amount if time to build up. If you're looking for instant gratification, you'll probably want to move on. My writings tend to be very long.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=499882 - give it a read! I'm getting fabulous feedback so far!

Thanks again for the advice.

Ginnnnnnnna!

 

[mokkelke]

i'll put this in my "to read" list for the coming week.

 

[GinaTina]

Excellent.

Thank you very much for considering. I hope you like it.

 

[mokkelke]

ok a bit later then i promised, but i've read it now

i liked the story, like how it started and how you told of the place and its history.

i can just imagine that world to be true, not thinking "oh, that can't be real". you managed to create an unique world fitting to this story.

the emotions are clear and in the right places.

it's IMO a damn fine start and i'd be pressing you to know how it will continue.

my only advise would be is to make sure your paragraphs aren't too long, as we know, reading online isn't the same as reading a book. large blocks tend to get tiresome on the eyes. personally i try to stay around maximum 8 Lit lines in a submitted story, of course this is a loose guideline, but i feel anything longer gets harder to read and keep the focus.

as you look at your published story you'll notice towards the end, when more and more starts to happen you automatically make them shorter, jumping from one scene to the next and that made the reading easier and kept me wrapped up in the story.

but the best i can say is well done and keep it up, i'll be wanting to know more now

 

[GinaTina]

You're too kind, really.

Thank you so much for your feedback. Both here and in the comments.

I did notice that the larger text blocks were a little harder to read. I think I've got myself out of that habit now. And yes, I did start to shorten them up automatically after I really got rolling.


I submitted the next chapter today; just waiting for it to get approved.

Thank you again.