coaster12345
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- Jun 29, 2002
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i haven't posted a story in a while. lots of domestic intrusions.
but on this holiday weekend, i thought, from a writer's perspective,
i'd offer a few thoughts on writing erotica for those starting out,
and those serious about the genre. i'm inclined toward the "loving
wives" area, in which tonytony3 is, in my view, the incomparable
master. but i'm not bad, so here goes . . .
first off, an erotic story isn't a report. nothing is more boring than a
story that starts out "my wife and i have been married ten years . . ."
along with that goes a description of the wife: "5'6, 130, 38 dd . . ."
etc etc. this, almost certainly, is a description of a husband's fantasy,
and a fantasy, to become arousing erotica, must be presented in
a story form.
think movies. paint the scene. start out with a sketch of it. "it was a
softly lighted room with french doors that opened onto a terrace
overlooking the sea, the kind we'd imagined in intimate moments of
years . . ." or put the reader subliminally into the action. "'ever think
about your previous lovers, hon?" i asked my wife in bed one night
after watching an erotic video of two couples swapping wives . . ."
you've got a scene, a past leading up to it, and a reader imagining
the scene.
make the story continue past the ending. not "and that's how we
celebrated our anniversary in jamaica,"" but "that was the
beginning of something even now we're not really sure of where
it's leading us . . . "
make the internal responses of the characters primary, not the
external physical sex. stories are about people, and our empathy
with them derives from our common humanity. poles in holes is
high sschool stuff. imagining a wife, suffused in passion, being
fucked by another man, looking into her husband's loving eyes,
saying, "he's fucking me, hon. . . he's fucking me while you watch . . ."
that's erotic.
watch language, especially verbs. "he began touching my breasts"
isn't near as erotic, in the building erotic cadence of a story, as the
simple past tense: "he touched my breasts." the present perfect tense
appropriately accompanies masturbation but doesn't serve erotic
writing to be read by others.
i'll let this go for now, but i have more to say in future posts,
when i can find the time, and would welcome serious questioners.
cheers,
coaster12345
but on this holiday weekend, i thought, from a writer's perspective,
i'd offer a few thoughts on writing erotica for those starting out,
and those serious about the genre. i'm inclined toward the "loving
wives" area, in which tonytony3 is, in my view, the incomparable
master. but i'm not bad, so here goes . . .
first off, an erotic story isn't a report. nothing is more boring than a
story that starts out "my wife and i have been married ten years . . ."
along with that goes a description of the wife: "5'6, 130, 38 dd . . ."
etc etc. this, almost certainly, is a description of a husband's fantasy,
and a fantasy, to become arousing erotica, must be presented in
a story form.
think movies. paint the scene. start out with a sketch of it. "it was a
softly lighted room with french doors that opened onto a terrace
overlooking the sea, the kind we'd imagined in intimate moments of
years . . ." or put the reader subliminally into the action. "'ever think
about your previous lovers, hon?" i asked my wife in bed one night
after watching an erotic video of two couples swapping wives . . ."
you've got a scene, a past leading up to it, and a reader imagining
the scene.
make the story continue past the ending. not "and that's how we
celebrated our anniversary in jamaica,"" but "that was the
beginning of something even now we're not really sure of where
it's leading us . . . "
make the internal responses of the characters primary, not the
external physical sex. stories are about people, and our empathy
with them derives from our common humanity. poles in holes is
high sschool stuff. imagining a wife, suffused in passion, being
fucked by another man, looking into her husband's loving eyes,
saying, "he's fucking me, hon. . . he's fucking me while you watch . . ."
that's erotic.
watch language, especially verbs. "he began touching my breasts"
isn't near as erotic, in the building erotic cadence of a story, as the
simple past tense: "he touched my breasts." the present perfect tense
appropriately accompanies masturbation but doesn't serve erotic
writing to be read by others.
i'll let this go for now, but i have more to say in future posts,
when i can find the time, and would welcome serious questioners.
cheers,
coaster12345
