Writing Challenge ~ April 2013 ~ Comments and Reviews

[Britwitch]

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ APRIL 2013​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 23rd April – 30th April 2013 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

 

[Miss_Vivi]

Oh I just had to leave some comments and thoughts for those who have posted. Cause I can!

First, Scuttles (I never call you Scuttles!)- Great post, of course. Upon re-reading it I didn't realize that first time that it was his sister that he found. Oh wow... and then they die together. Nicely done Daddy Dinotutu.

Alice- Holy crap, girl. I heard this guy's screams. You never said what he was guilty of, but I can guess and wow. Just wow. You write so hauntingly, and so beautifully, chica. For serious.

Gooner- You have a great outline for a story. Truly. But you get lost in tenses and grammar and the overuse of the ellipses, when a comma or new sentence would be appropriate. And then you left the story hanging! Did the girls find him? I get ending when it will draw the reader in, but truly you could have added more, and it would have been great.