Writing Challenge ~ 1st - 15th June 2011 ~ Reviews and Comments

[Britwitch]

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ JUNE 2011 ~ PART ONE​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 1st – 15th June 2011 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

 

[Britwitch]

Placeholder for extremely over due reviews!!

 

[Britwitch]

This challenge is now closed for new submissions, please do continue to read and discuss the pieces though!
Thanks to all who wrote New challenge coming very soon!​

 

[Last_Rider]

Georgia - Wideeyedone

Lovely little piece, a good bit of emotion spoken plainly through a few lines. Definitely a good submission.

Untitled - Ausus

Good little tale, evocative and feels like it could be lifted right out of native lore.

Untitled - M13

Unless I'm much mistaken these are the same characters from a few prompts back, the broken mirror if my memory is still good. Nice to see them again, and to see more of that story. This is all very good, descriptions, dialogue, just enough touch on the power that it makes sense. Very well done, I've got the impression you could do a novel with these two.

 

[marauder13]

Untitled - M13

Unless I'm much mistaken these are the same characters from a few prompts back, the broken mirror if my memory is still good. Nice to see them again, and to see more of that story. This is all very good, descriptions, dialogue, just enough touch on the power that it makes sense. Very well done, I've got the impression you could do a novel with these two.

You are very much correct, Rider. They are the same pair as in the submission "Awakening" ( April 2011, Challenge #2 ) I felt a desire to write when I saw the prompt, but I had no initial idea. The I thought about using them to demonstrate some of what happened after their initial meeting. I felt that it turned out quite well. Trying to explain what they are, and what they can do, was a challenge at first, but like all things, I decided on a little glimpse.