Writing Challenge ~ 16th - 30th June 2011 ~ Reviews & Comments

[Britwitch]

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ JUNE 2011 ~ PART TWO​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 16th – 30th June 2011 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

 

[fr33ks33k]

M13, your piece was an interesting look into the circle of reincarnation. I'm not familiar with Mage: The Ascension, but a few of my friends are White Wolf fans. It makes me want to pick up and read some of the backstory behind it. I like the flow, with sudden flashbacks and the finality of his decision. It seems fate will drive us to our destined positions, regardless of what we do to stem the tide.

Rider, I immensely enjoyed your submission. I instantly personified the hooded figure as Death, even though that may just be a coincidence. The occluded features of the man in black seems to reinforce my thought, but either way the piece is well written.

Kudos to both of you for another great showing.