Write More Chapters or Scrap It and Start Over?

[JJSMD1]

Hi folks,

The linked story here is my first attempt at writing erotica. I didn't get much feedback and I'd really appreciate any coments, positive or negative, on how I could improve and whether or not I should continue this story.

Thanks to anyone who takes the time to read this.

Chapter One: http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=284844

 

[lindiana]

Hi folks,

The linked story here is my first attempt at writing erotica. I didn't get much feedback and I'd really appreciate any coments, positive or negative, on how I could improve and whether or not I should continue this story.

Thanks to anyone who takes the time to read this.

Chapter One: http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=284844

I read your story. It is a nice beginning for your writing career.

A few notes:

As a former teacher, I was thrown by your overuse of the comma. You misused a great deal of punctuation.

One example: "Do I know you?," he asked.

You do not need the comma. Most Microsoft Word programs come with not only spell check but grammar check so you should be able to avoid these types of errors in the future.

It was an interesting scene but there wasn't much of a story. It consisted basically of a guy getting a blowjob in a bathroom. Considering the name of this website is litEROTICA, you would think that is enough. However, most of the readers like more plot, more dialogue with a beginning and an end to the story, not just a sex scene.

Just a few thoughts from me.

 

[JJSMD1]

Thanks!

I really appreciate the feedback; I'll be watching my puncutuation more closely in the future. Chapter Two just get approved today, but won't help on the lack-of-plot angle. The first two chapters are the set-up for the plot twist/development in the third. I hope you'll read on, because I would really value some insight.

Thanks for reading.