Would like feedback

[PetronellaV]

This is my first post to the forum. As the subject line says I'd like some feedback for the following story:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=213386

It's not the first story I've posted on the site, and while it's getting many views, it's not getting any kind of feedback.

What I'd like to know is what works in the story and what doesn't.

 

[Selbryth]

I actually liked it a lot. Nice style.

It seems as though it could be 2 or 3 chapters because there's so much going on; almost as if you're in a hurry to tell the story. The love making and the dancing could be separate parts, or maybe have them 'drift' together a little slower.

It's a very romantic tale though, I like the romance part of it. I guess there must be other parts previous that describe how the father and daughter first got together; in this piece it seems like they're used to it; no fears or qualms about incest (which in a way is beautiful!), and then they just start making love.

The love scenes are really great too. You could maybe extend them a little; slow them down, stretch them and perhaps go more into the inner thoughts and ideas of the main character.

Great work though, and an easy to read and follow style.

Take care

 

[PetronellaV]

Thank you

Thank you very much for reading and commenting on the story in question.

Do you know I never thought of the story as being romantic?

I think there's a hint in the story itself as to how long father and daughter have been sexually involved with each other. She mentions that they've been doing the morning quickie in the sunken tub since she was 10 years old. After 8 years the two are very much at ease with each other.

I know that my incest stories aren't like the ones you normally read here because, for the most part, I don't stress the incest as such.

Thanks again,

Petronella