Words

[AoNoDoY]

Saw after eyes two flesh past I
perch flame in doctor feed discern between
looks an occupy fell circumstances natural normal
girl technically this old met soon spared
should print better vivid bride I've half

 

[butters]

reading and re reading - a game of words, a teasing out of meaning . . . one moment i think it looks clear, the next the pictures blur and change, like those cereal box pics we used to have where you see one picture, but tilt it and that changes to something quite different.

 

[butters]

please, talk to us about this piece - and welcome back to posting!

 

[EducatedOwl]

I like the wordplay here, but I can't help feeling that at first glance I'm not receiving everything you're sending.

I'll echo Butters' request: tell us more!

 

[twelveoone]

Saw after eyes two flesh past I
perch flame in doctor feed discern between
looks an occupy fell circumstances natural normal
girl technically this old met soon spared
should print better vivid bride I've half

Serially (sic), I think he identified the Black Dahlia killer.

 

[butters]

Serially (sic), I think he identified the Black Dahlia killer.

ok, i went a-googling, being only familiar with the name and not the history behind it.
having read that, it makes sense, though i would never have got the real message in the poem, its code if you will. that clear an understanding would have eluded me as i didn't have the knowledge to bring to the table. perhaps a footnote or title to point the way would have seen me travel where i ought to have. as it stands, it remains clever but aloof to all but those who are familiar with the backstory of a possible name to the murderer.

http://www.biography.com/people/black-dahlia-21117617?page=1

i'm not entirely convinced by the story, mind: it just so happens that the person who claims his dr. father might be the murderer just happens to be an author.... anything's possible.

thanks for the information, mr.

 

[twelveoone]

ok, i went a-googling, being only familiar with the name and not the history behind it.
having read that, it makes sense, though i would never have got the real message in the poem, its code if you will. that clear an understanding would have eluded me as i didn't have the knowledge to bring to the table. perhaps a footnote or title to point the way would have seen me travel where i ought to have. as it stands, it remains clever but aloof to all but those who are familiar with the backstory of a possible name to the murderer.

http://www.biography.com/people/black-dahlia-21117617?page=1

i'm not entirely convinced by the story, mind: it just so happens that the person who claims his dr. father might be the murderer just happens to be an author.... anything's possible.

thanks for the information, mr.

I was joking. AoNoDoY's poem looks like word salad with wilted lettuce and a rotten tomato. i.e. it looks like a joke. And I possibly subjected myself to yet another round of devaluation.

AoNoDoY
oNo DoA Y?

 

[butters]

I was joking. AoNoDoY's poem looks like word salad with wilted lettuce and a rotten tomato. i.e. it looks like a joke. And I possibly subjected myself to yet another round of devaluation.

AoNoDoY
oNo DoA Y?

joking or no, it would seem to fit - with its references to dr, half, ordinary girl and more....

maybe, as i said before, i'm too easily suggestible.

doa? nah. it's life but not as we know it, jim