Words ... Make'm Stop !!

[RhymeFairy]

I have a vent and here it is:

I am repeatedly using the same words. I know everyone has this problem sometime or another, but darn it I am so furious with myself over it. I wanna stomp and rage. Pisses me off. I write, then read it ... Whammo there those tell tell words are, laughing at yours truly.

Most of these words are my adjectives, and metaphors. Think I need a tree trunk swung to the head to get'm all out. For good !! Grrrr ~

So I come to the threads and check out everyone else's words, thoughts, poems, writings ... and I still see my words, rolling around on the floor, laughing, and yes even sticking their tongues out at me.

I need a
*forget those words* pill,
the 12 step * do not ever use these words * program,
or some serious *do not disturb these words* counseling.

Anyone wanna help this LilLostMindlessFairy~

Oh yeah ~ I have used my thesaurus alot,
worn it in-two. Guess I was too much for it.



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[Recidiva]

But these words love you, they're a part of you.

Let 'em breathe.

 

[poeticidolhost]

give examples...

I know ..I like morph...sheep...resonate...and lots more...I know someone out there sees my patterns...ugh...we all have a pattern...tis a bitch....we are creatures of habit...at least I don't have to park in the same parking space...like a guy..ty...

 

[RhymeFairy]

I know ..I like morph...sheep...resonate...and lots more...I know someone out there sees my patterns...ugh...we all have a pattern...tis a bitch....we are creatures of habit...at least I don't have to park in the same parking space...like a guy..ty...

Oh lord, examples. Are you really asking me to *say them again? Like someone asking an alcoholic if they wanna drink ... ( no offense intended to anyone ~ )


pleasure
slide
release
burn
taste
satin
temptation
tingle
sultry
heated
hot
sunny

There are dozens more. Think of it. How often do you use
the word ... pleasure, if not use it ... then think it. I know
this is not normal. lol. Or is it?

See the problem, now I have become paranoid about it.
Well actually I was paranoid before this post, that was the reasoning,
behind the original post ~

 

[poeticidolhost]

I try not to use pleasure...but..I like sultry yum...can we create some new word meaing pleasure...think about it...some new word of sensual touch...ooooh by dang we should make it a challenge...a new word ...meanin pleasure...just an idea...smiles...

Oh lord, examples. Are you really asking me to *say them again? Like someone asking an alcoholic if they wanna drink ... ( no offense intended to anyone ~ )


pleasure
slide
release
burn
taste
satin
temptation
tingle
sultry
heated
hot
sunny

There are dozens more. Think of it. How often do you use
the word ... pleasure, if not use it ... then think it. I know
this is not normal. lol. Or is it?

See the problem, now I have become paranoid about it.
Well actually I was paranoid before this post, that was the reasoning,
behind the original post ~

 

[Liar]

pleasure
slide
release
burn
taste
satin
temptation
tingle
sultry
heated
hot
sunny

A theasaurus ain't going to help you much I'm afraid. They'll only give you similar words on the same level of abstraction and in the same style as you already have.

You need to rethink... let's look at one of those: Burn. How can you say that something burns without using that word? First of all I assume it actually doesn't "burn" very much in your poems. Are they about fires and matches and stuff? Not all the time, right? So the "burning" is most of the time metaphorical already. So you don't actually need the word at all. What is burning? Passion? Desire? Why is it burning? Can it do something else? Can you omit directly mentioning that which is burning alltogether, and throw something else in that represents it instead?

And if you want to burn stuff, next time try to burn something a little more unusual, like bordeom. Because what you need is not nessecarily to omit words, it's to start fucking around with them a bit.

 

[wildsweetone]

try this...

write a poem with only one adjective.


i suggest that by limiting the amount of adjectives (for a start) you will be forced to think of other ways of saying the same thing and it might force you to use other, perhaps stronger, verbs. with practise you'll notice a big difference.



oh and please... post up the poem you write if you try this exercise.

 

[clutching_calliope]

There was a thread

.....

 

[My Erotic Trail]

what is an adjective <laughing

That old saying comes to mind, if it feels good, do it <use it>

 

[wildsweetone]

i.e. the tanned cowboy jumped the high fence and landed in a green cowpat.

tanned, high and green are the adjectives.

adjectives are descriptive words that 'enhance' the noun.

cowboy, fence, cowpat are the nouns, basically.




or, more formally:

ad·jec·tive Audio pronunciation of "adjective" ( P ) Pronunciation Key (jk-tv)
n. Abbr. a. or adj.

1. The part of speech that modifies a noun or other substantive by limiting, qualifying, or specifying and distinguished in English morphologically by one of several suffixes, such as -able, -ous, -er, and -est, or syntactically by position directly preceding a noun or nominal phrase.
2. Any of the words belonging to this part of speech, such as white in the phrase a white house.


adj.

1. Adjectival: an adjective clause.
2. Law. Prescriptive; remedial: adjective law.
3. Not standing alone; derivative or dependent.

 

[eagleyez]

I dunno if this will apply to you, but when I feel any sort of writing rut, I lay down my pen (or in our case, the keyboard), and read. And I will resist the temptation to attempt to write and just force myself to read, anything and everything, I can get my hands on.

This tends to air out my head, gets me to stop thinking, and eventually, my perceived problem clears.

Again, this is just my tried and true solution. Overthinking can be a writer's worst enemy.

Good luck with it.

 

[TheRainMan]

I have a vent and here it is:

I am repeatedly using the same words. ...

...most of these words are my adjectives...

In my opinion, overuse of adjectives is one the most common faults of a new poet, and also a fault many poets refuse to fix. They just keep overusing them again and again, and because of it their writing remains vague and uninteresting.

Nouns and verbs carry image, not modifiers. Modifiers are shadows. That's just the way the language works, and works best. Subject/Predicate/Object.

My suggestion is simple. Write with no adjectives or adverbs at all. Use no modifiers. Let the nouns and verbs carry the poem. When you edit, you can put in modifiers, but do it delicately, adding only those that seem essential.

 

[annaswirls]

your cowpats are green? holy cow! what do you feed the poor things?

i.e. the tanned cowboy jumped the high fence and landed in a green cowpat.

tanned, high and green are the adjectives.

adjectives are descriptive words that 'enhance' the noun.

cowboy, fence, cowpat are the nouns, basically.




or, more formally:

 

[annaswirls]

can I get an amen!?

In my opinion, overuse of adjectives is one the most common faults of a new poet, and also a fault many poets refuse to fix. They just keep overusing them again and again, and because of it their writing remains vague and uninteresting.

Nouns and verbs carry image, not modifiers. Modifiers are shadows. That's just the way the language works, and works best. Subject/Predicate/Object.

My suggestion is simple. Write with no adjectives or adverbs at all. Use no modifiers. Let the nouns and verbs carry the poem. When you edit, you can put in modifiers, but do it delicately, adding only those that seem essential.

 

[sandspike]

this house ain't got but one wall

beach, sand, aqua, long neck, blonde, ...and the list goes on. Write
what you know just change the shades a little.

 

[wildsweetone]

your cowpats are green? holy cow! what do you feed the poor things?

green as in not set. you never stood in a new cowpat? you haven't lived!

 

[Sara Crewe]

green as in not set. you never stood in a new cowpat? you haven't lived!

I am not sure what it says about us, but as kids my cousins and I would take sticks and mess around with the new green deposits in the field. Don't ask me why.

Ah, the good ole days.

 

[annaswirls]

green as in not set. you never stood in a new cowpat? you haven't lived!

hmmm, I guess I just never caught em quickly enough.

Oh, as far as being stuck with certain words, I think it is always a help to:
1. Read something that is uncharacteristic of your typical reading. Science fiction if you are into romance, etc.
2. Go away somewhere that is not your usual get away. Vacation if possible, but not necessary. Try to imagine you are the people who are "regulars." I sat among the Scrabble club for a series of mondays and got some great new words to use eh hem and the points that go along with them.

 

[Guest]

Every poet here has favorite words they like to use in almost all of their poems. I can honestly say that I sometimes get tired of seeing their favorite words in a poem again—mine included.

 

[Liar]

mine included.

...which is?


I used to put "somehow" in every other poem for a while. But then I got bored of it. I probably still have some that are on instant repeater, but I have no idea which those are.

 

[RhymeFairy]

Thank you !!! * Smiles *

Hi ya ... again.

I have been reading, and very busy. BUT, I had to Thank You all for the great commentary. I have tried many of these. I also did see Liar's thread about replacing a word. I think that is a great idea too.

So I figured I would do as ya'll said and take a mini break, so far it seems to be working. I try to write and I can't. It is in those forgotten moments that it comes to me as of late, lol. Driving down the freeway, late, music blaring ... then it *starts. Words come and I have no way or time to write them down, grrrr ... lol.

Just wanted to say YOU ALL have some wonderful ideas, and I will prob. be trying each and every one of them.

Thanks for taking the time to help ...

As far as those *Green deposits~ Ya'll are talkin' to a farm gurl, born'n raised. I have been skiing in them and everything. Even fell smack down a time or two. Covered in cow poo head to toe ... Now that, is a wake up call.

=== Skiing ~ from the cows tail, in rain boots. I know it sounds mean to the cow, but I was young. We would herd them down into the barn for milking. Animal abuse I know .... Swear that was the only abuse to the cow !! lmao

 

[RhymeFairy]

try this...

write a poem with only one adjective.


i suggest that by limiting the amount of adjectives (for a start) you will be forced to think of other ways of saying the same thing and it might force you to use other, perhaps stronger, verbs. with practise you'll notice a big difference.



oh and please... post up the poem you write if you try this exercise.

Considering this exercise. For some reason, I seriously have writers block. I have been away too long and have so much I want to write about. I am stressed out a bit, allll the time, thinking that's my cause. Now, to just relax and write.

I will do this, b4 the week is out!!



*happy dance*

 

[MyZenTrail]

Considering this exercise. For some reason, I seriously have writers block. I have been away too long and have so much I want to write about. I am stressed out a bit, allll the time, thinking that's my cause. Now, to just relax and write.

I will do this, b4 the week is out!!



*happy dance*

superfabtabulous~