Wording

[TarnishedPenny]

Okay, I’m a sucker for the language. Would it be too far over the line, in the case of a man enchanted by a succubus, to describe him as having ‘megalodonic’ lust?

 

[MindYaBitness]

Yes

 

[NotWise]

I looked up "megalodonic" and came up with a really big fossil shark. If you're using that as a metaphor, then I think few of your readers are going to get it. On the other hand, the "mega" part might be enough to get the idea across.

 

[joy_of_cooking]

I knew what a megalodon was but still can't figure out how a man's lust would be megalodonic. The megalodon was an apex predator, but if the guy is being enchanted by a succubus that makes him the prey, right?

 

[Britva415]

Okay, I’m a sucker for the language. Would it be too far over the line, in the case of a man enchanted by a succubus, to describe him as having ‘megalodonic’ lust?

I reserve judgement until you explain what you intend for it to mean and why this neologism provides that meaning.

Though, it really should speak for itself. If the meaning isn't obvious without explanation, it isn't going to work. But indulge me and do explain!

 

[mildlyaroused]

I think the meaning is obvious without explanation. Even for the minority who don't know the word 'megalodon', it's not hard to use context clues and figure it out through 'mega.' My main question would be whether it fits the mood? Does 'megalodonic' sound sexy? I guess it depends how the rest of the story is written, but it'd certainly be out of place in a fluffy romance.

 

[Bamagan]

Okay, I’m a sucker for the language. Would it be too far over the line, in the case of a man enchanted by a succubus, to describe him as having ‘megalodonic’ lust?

Only if he sleeps with the fishes.

 

[EmilyMiller]

Okay, I’m a sucker for the language. Would it be too far over the line, in the case of a man enchanted by a succubus, to describe him as having ‘megalodonic’ lust?

Big tooth love?

Emily

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Okay, that’s a nonstarter and thanks for the feedback. My original thought was that the demon had been teasing him until his lust was huge, hungry and unstoppable, hence the major carnivore.

Appreciate the comments.

tp

 

[TheRedChamber]

Yes

Word for word how I was going to reply.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Okay, that’s a nonstarter and thanks for the feedback. My original thought was that the demon had been teasing him until his lust was huge, hungry and unstoppable, hence the major carnivore.

Appreciate the comments.

tp

I have a general principle on posts like your OP, that when folk come here with such questions, they already know the answer. "Would it be too far over the line?" If you need to ask the question you were probably right the first time - coz the answer is nearly always, yes .

 

[lustychimera]

Okay, that’s a nonstarter and thanks for the feedback. My original thought was that the demon had been teasing him until his lust was huge, hungry and unstoppable, hence the major carnivore.

Appreciate the comments.

tp

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Okay, that’s a nonstarter and thanks for the feedback. My original thought was that the demon had been teasing him until his lust was huge, hungry and unstoppable, hence the major carnivore.

Appreciate the comments.

tp

sometimes simpler is better, overwhelming, insatiable lust.

 

[Smuttyandfun]

sometimes simpler is better, overwhelming, insatiable lust.

or unbridled

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

or unbridled

And…

 

[Voboy]

Yeah.

"Megalodonic" would take me out of the story.

 

[Pabiporffor]

Megalodick? Lets get it in the dictionary.

 

[bbcbarry9033]

Okay, that’s a nonstarter and thanks for the feedback. My original thought was that the demon had been teasing him until his lust was huge, hungry and unstoppable, hence the major carnivore.

Appreciate the comments.

tp

So maybe megalodonic craving or frenzy... and stay with the metaphor a little longer.

Props for making an effort to break away from the pack.

 

[Voboy]

As I ponder it some more, there's a type of story where it might work. It's the sort of word I might expect to see in a Tom Robbins story, for example. But in those, it wouldn't just come from nowhere; he'd have signposted a bunch of weird words throughout.

 

[StillStunned]

Seeing it written, it looks like a portmanteau of megalomaniac and moronic. Nothing about it says "relentless predator".

 

[EmilyMiller]

Seeing it written, it looks like a portmanteau of megalomaniac and moronic. Nothing about it says "relentless predator".

Apart from most of the word, right?

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Megalodon

Emily

 

[StillStunned]

Apart from most of the word, right?

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Megalodon

Emily

The -ic" at the end gives it entirely different connotations.

 

[EmilyMiller]

The -ic" at the end gives it entirely different connotations.

You’re so right, like “to do with a Megalodon” as opposed to “a Megalodon” it’s like the unicorn scene in Blade Runner all over again.

Emily

 

[StillStunned]

You’re so right

That's my takeaway from this conversation.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

My takeaway is that I shouldn’t try to get too creative.

Thanks again!