Kettle Corn
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Winona Does Her Duty Ch. 01
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Winona Does Her Duty
I liked this story. I liked the first scene with Winona watching tv trying to gauge public reaction and her likely legal trouble. I could definitely see a celebrity doing that.
One of the only problems I have with the story is her reason for leaving the house. The caller on the other end says he can help her out but nothing else. Why would she leave? I'm just guessing it will turn out to be the judge that wants to bang her for $10,000. But its not clear enough what power this guy holds that would get a celebrity to suck off cops and do anal over just one phone call.
Also, spellcheck. I noticed several mis-spelled words which I find distracting.
Otherwise nice story and I can't wait to see the next chapter.
J.Q. Hack
I liked this story. I liked the first scene with Winona watching tv trying to gauge public reaction and her likely legal trouble. I could definitely see a celebrity doing that.
One of the only problems I have with the story is her reason for leaving the house. The caller on the other end says he can help her out but nothing else. Why would she leave? I'm just guessing it will turn out to be the judge that wants to bang her for $10,000. But its not clear enough what power this guy holds that would get a celebrity to suck off cops and do anal over just one phone call.
Also, spellcheck. I noticed several mis-spelled words which I find distracting.
Otherwise nice story and I can't wait to see the next chapter.
J.Q. Hack
msboy8
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Hey K.C. I read and voted on your story. I still have problems with the word 'Redemption'. Also Winona stcking her finger in her ass after being forceably taken in her virgin ass-hole with a 9 inch dick, with no lube or preparation. She should have brrought a bloody finger out of her ass. Keep the story going and keep writing, after all it IS a fantasy. 
