Why doesn't this work?

[AG31]

Maybe that would be less clunky if I had read the whole story and already known about a previous moment at a party.

Nope. Nothing about the party, nothing about Kyle, nothing about being gay. This was clearly the author's way of introducing us to this aspect of his MC's personality. And doesn't mention it again until page 172, or thereabouts.

 

[anthrodisiac]

Nope. Nothing about the party, nothing about Kyle, nothing about being gay. This was clearly the author's way of introducing us to this aspect of his MC's personality. And doesn't mention it again until page 172, or thereabouts.

This is egregious then. It's not plinkage, it's far worse. It's just... bad. And annoying. And bad.

*sharpens sickle claws*