Who Snite and the Seven Whores

[MarshAlien]

One commenter called it "a fascinating allegorical satire of America's relations with the so-called developing world." But it always looks self-serving when I have to quote myself, so I decided to seek feedback from my friends. And, um, you guys.

Who Snite and the Seven Whores Pt. 01 and Who Snite and the Seven Whores Pt. 02 are the first four chapters in the story of the clash between technogically advanced, misogynist Dyspepsia and rural, egalitarian Uncola. Played out against the backdrop of a whorehouse whose inhabitants shelter an injured amnesiac, the story explores the power of the beverage-industrial complex without sacrificing its fairy tale milieu.

And it has sex.

Plus, I have had a lot of fun writing it.

Anyway, I'd love to have some feedback.

 

[tickledkitty]

Uh...A little over five hours, and you've got seven reads and no posts.

 

[tickledkitty]

Alright. I took pity on you and read part one. It's very well written, of course. I especially liked the mix of modern day culture with old-fashioned sensibilities. It reminded me of Shrek in that regard. Again, I'm referencing animation, which you will see from my PC. Odd.

On to part two...

 

[MarshAlien]

Alright. I took pity on you and read part one. It's very well written, of course. I especially liked the mix of modern day culture with old-fashioned sensibilities. It reminded me of Shrek in that regard. Again, I'm referencing animation, which you will see from my PC. Odd.

On to part two...

So this is what a pity post feels like, huh? Preceded by a pity read, a pity vote, and a pity PC...

I'm desperate. I'll take 'em anyway I can get 'em. Thanks, TK.

 

[tickledkitty]

Oh, is this a pity party, Marshbaby? I was kidding.

 

[MarshAlien]

Oh, is this a pity party, Marshbaby? I was kidding.

I know. I just did it to get another look at your AV. Cute tail.

 

[tickledkitty]

Such a charmer.

I'll read the second part when I'm not feeling so dull and can actually make some sort of intelligent comments. Long day.