Wheel Challenge: Snapshot

[HarryHill]

Thank to everyone who submitted, I know forms are a challenge to some of us.

As cascadiabound is on the West side of NA, her submission made it in under the timeline, which makes Harry the penultimate contributor. Accordingly he gets to decide where the next challenge goes.

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As the title implies gentle poets, create a picture/image, visual or metaphorical of something that catches or holds your attention.

have fun.
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Additionally, if you are new to this challenge series, please visit the previous installments to read or post your own poetic interpretation.
Of course, anyone can jump right in at any point.

first, HarryHill: Wheel Of The Year

second, cascadiabound: Gratitude

third, Mrtenant: Dancing

fourth, greenmountaineer: Outdoor Games

fifth, Underyourspell: Superstition

sixth, Piscator: Right Place Wrong Time

seventh cascadiabound: Road Trips

eighth, HarryHill: Treehouse

ninth, Piscator: The Times They Are A Changing

tenth, Mrtenant: Rainy Day

eleventh, Remec: The Big Game

twelfth, Underyourspell: Extra Terrestrials

thirteenth, butters: Do Trees Snore?

fourteenth, Mrtenant: A Dog's Life

fifteenth, todski: True Masculine Influence

sixteeth, Mrtenant: Campfire

seventeenth, Underyourspell: Six Legs or more

eighteenth(a), Underyourspell: Write a Parody

eighteenth(b), oggbashan: Hymn to Apollo




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[butters]

place-saver

 

[cascadiabound]

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As the title implies gentle poets, create a picture/image, visual or metaphorical of something that catches or holds your attention.

have fun.

Hi Harry ~

Could you please specify the end of this challenge and the basis upon which the next OP will be chosen?

I hope you are feeling all better.

cb

 

[Senna Jawa]

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[...] create a picture/image, visual or metaphorical of something that catches or holds your attention.

Harry, could you narrow down the scope of your request? As it is now, I feel that over 80% of poems are (or should be ) covered by it.

 

[HarryHill]

Hi Harry ~

Could you please specify the end of this challenge and the basis upon which the next OP will be chosen?
I hope you are feeling all better.
cb

Feeling wonderfully better tyvm
The challenge will run the usual length ending this Easter Sunday midnight your local time, bon chance

Harry, could you narrow down the scope of your request? As it is now, I feel that over 80% of poems are (or should be ) covered by it.

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They do indeed

 

[Mrtenant]

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As the title implies gentle poets, create a picture/image, visual or metaphorical of something that catches or holds your attention.

have fun.

So basically


Make a pome


Got it

 

[HarryHill]

So basically


Make a pome


Got it

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I'ma have trouble with you lot this week aren't I?

My love, half face to pillow,
covers drawn tight,
soft expressionless sleep,
baby doll lips

 

[butters]

 

[UnderYourSpell]

The words I love you
can never be enough,
when I want to paint
through the tallest treetops
autumn leaves ablaze,
write across the sky
with fireworks.

Yet whisper,
so only you can hear.

 

[Mrtenant]

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I'ma have trouble with you lot this week aren't I?

My love, half face to pillow,
covers drawn tight,
soft expressionless sleep,
baby doll lips

You just may.

 

[Senna Jawa]

As the title implies gentle poets, create a picture/image, visual or metaphorical of something that catches or holds your attention.

Here is a gentle suggestion of a gentle modification. Instead of or, let there be AND, e.g.

create a picture/image that catches or holds your attention,
an image which is at the same time both. visual and metaphorical.​

Hm, this would cut the range from 80% to 60%. Oh, well...

 

[butters]

So basically


Make a pome


Got it

the way i interpret the notion of 'snapshot' is something brief that recreates an entire image of a moment in time, and is strengthened by emotional resonances they may engender in the reader. for me, H's poem does exactly that.

 

[Senna Jawa]

the last summer concert...

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the last summer concert
- ----- in san jose ----​

would you like to dance with a stranger?
she looked at me why not?
slow dance
then she had to rush to san francisco​

wh,
1995-10-30​

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[Senna Jawa]

p...........

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perspective -- prison corridor​

wh,
a looong time ago​

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[Senna Jawa]

w.........

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winter on my face​

wh,
1996-01-01​

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[Senna Jawa]

i..................

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i am a.m. and so sleepy​

wh,
2006-03-23
​

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[butters]

red coffee can
at a jaunty angle
top-hatting a silver cane
aged bamboo canted
and sunk knee-deep
in a gaggle of young strawberries

 

[HarryHill]

Coffee Break

Heron slides between the trees,
vehicle speeds past down the road,
Fucker.

 

[HarryHill]

Broken lotus beside dressed row,
bow, divot, plant, water,
slide down, another tray from the dwindling flat.

Here's Ku. There's more to do.
Two finish what one started.
Run down the road. Run back.
Rain tomorrow' imagine that.
Down time.

 

[butters]

slender brown rat
swift death
peanut butter still
on his tongue

 

[butters]

ma'am by the stove
soft grey dressing gown
hot-buttered toast

 

[butters]

2 dogs clowning for camera
one upside down
2 lolling tongues

 

[HarryHill]

ma'am by the stove
soft grey dressing gown
hot-buttered toast

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Brilliant

 

[cascadiabound]

red and white fur flies
past my legs into the thicket
gone after a cat or rabbit
thrashing in the brush
white tipped tail a brief flag
no turning back now
driven by prey instinct

I do not know if this meets the challenge criteria or not?​

 

[Angeline]

The calm spreads like light
on our glistening sea,
blue hardly perturbed.

Almost merry my relief
that sinks on the shore,
fizzy as a sigh there,
the breath of tide
Inhaled anew.