What's your favorite line you wrote?

[davion2308]

I go back every so often and enjoy my own published works to get motivation and see how far I've come from writing years ago.

I read a story from last Spring and I saw this passage:

"Abby shook her head, "Nope, if I'm doing this, you're doing this. Your cock will be getting some fresh air, swinging in the breeze. Get some shoes. Let's go." She stood up and walked into the bedroom. Eric decided to panic."

I'm proud I had that last line in there and I really like it. We're a touchy, sensitive, fragile-ego'd bunch and we take the wins where we can.

Does anyone else have a favorite line or passage they wrote? I'm curious what all of you have come up with.

Please share!

 

[BarracudaSwordfish]

There are a few, but Thea in "Pick on Someone Your Own Size" always makes me smile when I read her back.

She's a feisty little Scottish lassie, and when she meets her Norwegian boss for the first time, another Norwegian girl says something nasty to her in her native tongue and flounces off.

When the boss asks her why she has just been called a fucking little lesbian, she replies...

I laughed out loud. “So that’s what she keeps calling me!” I stubbed out my cigarette. “You seem to be the sort of person that likes plain talking, so I’ll tell you straight. Every word of it is true. I’m a tidge under five feet tall, so ‘little’ seems appropriate. I’m in a same sex relationship, so ‘lesbian’ is undoubtedly true. And as for the first word – well, as we say in these parts, ‘Wha’ disnae like a guid fuck?”

Needless to say, she and the boss are all over each other before the end of the story...

 

[SimonDoom]

One of my favorites was from my story BTB, Incorporated, where the private detective narrator breaks the news to his client that his wife is having an affair:


He'd known what was coming, and he'd had three days to prepare for it, and still he shook like a baby in the hands of a psychotic day care provider.

 

[oggbashan]

The single sentence that is my story Breathless Stargazing.

https://www.literotica.com/beta/s/breathless-stargazing

 

[PoisonPen33]

"I'm putty in your hands." "In my hands, nothing turns to putty."

 

[MColton84]

"Physically, I have arrived at my destination. For those who are still on their journey, know that my heart goes out to you and that you are beautiful." -Alex Sloan, Trap or Treat: Triumph

I love that line. It was meant to offer hope to people in transition. I thought it was a nice heartfelt sentiment.

 

[Phantom300]

From Jackin' Jacks

I became dangerously aware that I was still naked, and in bed with my little sister.

 

[MartaMaine]

Nothing erotic, this is from a novel I'm working on

"Cliff Harris pushed the mop across the floor off the barracks, wistfully thinking about what would it be like to be on the other side of the English Channel. He imagined the brave soldiers rampaging up the beaches in France, carving a swathe through the Germans and on to Berlin, bringing the war to an end before Christmas."

 

[jaF0]

"His mind is not for rent, to any God or Government'.

Oh wait, that's not mine :: grins ::

I don't know if it's the best, but it's quirky. After a case of mistaken identity:

"Oh, yeah, hey Mom, I just fucked Carol down at the strip club where she works!'

 

[lovecraft68]

I have a few, but most are along the snarky comeback or liner variety, but a couple that I wrote kind of off the cuff, but during edits thought were pretty good.

"Sometimes too much faith is worse than no faith at all."

And "Often something has to be broken before it can be made whole."

I'm a regular erotica Confucius

 

[CyranoJ]

"Oh, another heads-up: "the hot, dripping semen of the alien time bandits" is a phrase you can expect to encounter pretty frequently, so this is definitely a trigger warning for alien time bandits and hot, dripping semen."

Best appreciated with context, it's from "A Short Disclaimer" in the Humor category (see the links in my sig). It's one of the sentences I've written on here that most persistently brings a smile to my face, personally. Someone actually did a translation of that story into Hungarian for fun, which I was tremendously tickled by.

Close second:

'"You do have a way with words, Sonny James. Now," she reared up and bit his lower lip and breathed her demand into his mouth: "Stop talking and fuck me."'

The final line of "Heart Like a Lion," and I think my fave final line of any story of mine.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

"Itching... powder... in... Mrs... Claus'... talcum... powder?" This time, Santa's voice had dropped to a bare whisper, pregnant with menace.

Santa, Baby

 

[Andi_Chase]

As far as serious lines go, I wrote this a few days ago and I'm really proud of the entire story.

People had to have noticed, right? Ollie wasn't stupid. Then again, would he say anything? He seemed to have his own issues with body insecurities, so Jarred could see him just not pointing it out. Did anyone else care to notice? Or was it just assumed that he was a junkie, so of course he'd be a skeleton underneath the nice clothes he wore? Did people see him as a rich party boy, a needy slut, a charming charlatan, or just some drug addict who relied on his mother's money?

Who was Jarred Augustine Abernathy, really?

As far as humor goes...

He straightened up and started heading down the stairs. "Well, it's not every morning I wake up to a bunch of hot guys in my living room."

"It's 1:30 in the afternoon, dude." One of them joked.

 

[YDB95]

The last line of Chemistry of Love. I won't repeat it here so as to not spoil it for anyone who'd like to read the story first, but I remain immensely proud of it.

 

[Rustyoznail]

From https://www.literotica.com/s/moving-to-the-suburbs

One wet Thursday morning Tony was barreling along the road to the station when he saw a small, despondent pair of navy pants hiding under a very large golf umbrella at a bus stop.

It's got a bit of a laugh.

 

[HappySpouse]

In Keep the Blindfold On, two women were kissing who had previously been going down on other women. They would've been able taste the other women on each other, and after a moment, I put in the line...

"...their tongues were still sharing their secrets..."

Something about that one is just hot to me. I like it so much I've considered putting in another story.

 

[PoisonPen33]

"...their tongues were still sharing their secrets..."

That is indeed erotic as fuck.

 

[gunhilltrain]

A woman is discussing her sexual dissatisfaction with her ex-husband.

“That pathetic Chuck, he couldn’t find a clitoris if a chart was attached to the headboard.”

 

[EddieTheMuse]

"His mind is not for rent, to any God or Government'.

Oh wait, that's not mine :: grins ::

'Always hopeful yet discontent
He knows changes aren't permanent'


Hmmm my favorite line...let me go find one. I can't think of anything that jumps out.

 

[yowser]

Early on in Infernal Fornications

My organ stirred as I heard her mention 'orthography' then 'blind stamped calfskin'.

 

[EddieTheMuse]

I like this line 'No one told spring there was a pandemic'
from this paragraph

'One morning we wake up and everything is different outside. The grass is lush and green. The buds on the trees have little blooms. My mom's daffodils and tulips are popping up and there are dandelions everywhere. No one told spring there was a pandemic.
It's strange to see everything in nature being normal when nothing in the world is normal now.'

 

[EddieTheMuse]

Or this one
I look over at him again.
"Happy Valentine's Day...I...shit...I just...I mean...this is just...we're friends..." he rambles.
"Did you get something for your other friends? For Tim?" I ask him.
He shakes his head. "I don't want to kiss Tim."

 

[PoisonPen33]

'Always hopeful yet discontent
He knows changes aren't permanent'

I will not start quoting Rush, I will not start quoting Rush...

I almost used "Grand Designs" for the "A Song From My Story, A Story For My Song" contest.

 

[MelissaBaby]

I'm still very pleased with this.

The first passage of My Fall and Rise:

"Would it have been better if the sky were blue and the trees were green and the wild flowers blossomed along the roadside? Or would the end of so much color in my life have made it harder to bear?"

And 13 chapters later, the last:

"I could hear the day's first birdsong, and from up the stairs, the soft sleeping sounds of a man who loved me. I sat for a long time and watched, as the sun sparkled through the trees and then rose to illuminate the houses and the cars, the lawns and the flowerbeds, and the world filled with color."

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Too good a thread to let die, so I’ll throw another one in.

Sometimes, sometimes, He would kiss me. I lived for those moments.

Dianne