what i have learned from you

[PieTaster]

what i have learned from you

that exposing my feelings
but leaves me vulnerable
that my affection is worthless
and that i am not loveable

that there's no sense in trying
to be thoughtful and caring
and there's no sense in offering
what isn't worth sharing

that as much as two lovers
ought not be competitors
i am the loser
and you are the victor

 

[Tzara]

what i have learned from you

that exposing my feelings
but leaves me vulnerable
that my affection is worthless
and that i am not loveable

that there's no sense in trying
to be thoughtful and caring
and there's no sense in offering
what isn't worth sharing

that as much as two lovers
ought not be competitors
i am the loser
and you are the victor

Hi, PT.

You give no indication of what you want or expect from posting your poem here. I presume you are looking for some kind of comment, so I will point out that your first two lines don't make sense as written. I think you mean either

that exposing my feelings {has some effect}
but leaves me vulnerable​

or, more simply

that exposing my feelings
leaves me vulnerable​

In any case, you've found a swell place to talk about poetry. You might want to leave a note in Ms. Swirls' Roll Call thread and tell us a bit about who you are and what you're looking for.

Hang around. Write poetry. Gossip.

It's, like, fun.