What do you think?

[LegsattheLake]

Hello everyone,

I am fairly new to writing and submitting, and I am interested in what people think about my stories. Let me know what you think of them!

"Leslie and I" - htttp://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=376649
"A Good Day at School" - http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=373593


Thank you in advance!

LegsattheLake

 

[The_Fractal_King]

You've got some great fetishes and describe them well but the characters come off as shallow and one dimensional. They aren't shown having much life outside of sex (which is fine in a stroke story but doesn't really make for compelling reading). You're not a bad writer by any stretch but the stories could stand to be drawn out a bit longer so we can get to know who the characters are.

 

[LegsattheLake]

Thanks King! I really appreciate it! I see what you mean with the character development, and I'll try to give them a little more dimension in the future.

 

[RicoLouis]

I think the sex scene is a little to short, It takes a good while to get to the good stuff. Which I don't mind but when you get there it its just sort of wam bam thank you ma'am kind of writing. A little more talking with be nice.

 

[LegsattheLake]

Thanks Rico! I appreciate it. I will work some more talking into it.