What did she say?

[Axeltheswede]

I am working on a threesome story - one man, two women. Golden showers are essential to the action. The man is on the receiving end. The first woman steps up and delivers the goods, so to speak. The second woman steps up and freezes. The second woman whispers something in her ear. Magic. It works.

What did she whisper?

I have tried everything short of a brain transplant to come up with something. I need your help with some ideas. Please.

 

[Spinaroonie]

It's blindingly obvious!

She whispered "The Kabuja mushroom sitting all alone, WHO would believe you? WHO would believe you?"

What.. Did you think I'd say something like FIRST POST?

 

[Route66Girl]

lol

Axel, lol! Golden showers, I regret to inform you, thoroughly gross me out. But, heck, I'll take a shot at it.

It's difficult to advise you on this bit of hidden dialogue without knowing the characters or the nature of the sex scene leading up to this point. I assume that woman #2 freezes up because what she's about to do is initially repugnant to her (in which case, how did she get to that point to begin with?), and that the man is totally willing to be subjected to this.

Anyways...

What about...

"Pretend he's a Depends undergarment!"

Okay, okay. You probably don't want it to be a joke. How about:

"If you do this, I'll give that special treat you've been begging me for."

"Don't make me think you're a coward, dear. You've wanted this for as long as you can remember. This is your chance. Take it."

"Relax... just let it go."

"Look how much he wants it. He's begging for it. You want to please him, don't you?"

Oh, well. I think the best option may be like the "special treat" suggestion. Perhaps it's the idea of a long-desired reward that prompts her to let go.

Just a thought or two. Good luck.

 

[NoJo]

GS

I think you meant the *fisrt* woman whispers something in the second woman's ear.

I actually asked a prodomme speciailizing in g.s. about this. She said that she kept a small syringe hidden in her panties!

 

[DVS]

"Act like you are a helicopter, and he is Colorado. Put out his fire"

 

[Axeltheswede]

What did she say

Thanks to Sub Joe for pointing out the mistake in the original post. Threesome is a husband and wife being introduced to their first such experience by another woman. The wife is the one with the "bashful bladder".

I did get a PM on this from an author wishing to remain anonymous. His suggestion, "Remember that vacuum cleaner he got you for your anniversary". As a former husband myself, who has been there and done that, the line is believable.

A good one liner would be fun. But, it would probably spoil the moment for the golden showers fans.

Route 66 Girl's suggestion, "Look how much he wants it. He's begging for it. You want to please him, don't you?", is consistent with the heat of the action.

Any other suggestions?

 

[TheWriter]

Write it from the husband's perspective. Then you don't have to know what she said.

 

[Couture]

Did he tell you he's been fucking me?

 

[wildsweetone]

oh couture

i have to say that had me in complete fits! i love it

 

[Axeltheswede]

What did she say

Thank you all for the assistance. It got me past a real sticking point for this story.

For TheWriter. Even telling the story from the husband's POV wouldn't let me off the hook about revealing what she said. I didn't want to borrow the "briefcase mystery" from "Pulp Fiction".

Couture's suggestion works best. Seems like anger would displace reluctance in a flash with the wife. Her desire to lash out and having the means at hand, so to speak, works in the story.

 

[wildsweetone]

and thus the reluctant tinkle of golden shower turns into a torrentially swollen Niagara...

rofl boy do i have a warped sense of humour or what (rhetorical question).


do tell when it's posted axeltheswede

 

[Axeltheswede]

What did she say

It might be a while, wildsweetone. My most recent story post, an incest/lactation tale between mother and son from India, has gotten me into deep doo-doo. Not often you can piss off an entire sub-continent, but it can be done.

By the way, I've always thought the average male would consent to be peed on if he could get a good look at where it came from. That might be a good question for a poll.

 

[abashed-dreamer]

Assuming this isn't a prankish question:

A bashful bladder is not always 'coaxable', but, I'd have the
woman say to the wife
"Remember being in the shower, warm water running over your pussy and the pee just comes."

Jack

 

[karmadog]

What?!? Women PEE!?! And in the SHOWER?!?!?!?

Say it isn't so!

 

[Quasimodem]

In the old days, you could tell her "The rabbit died."

These days, maybe "The test stick turned blue."

Trouble is, you JUST want her to pee. Right?

 

[wildsweetone]

too funny!

take note! it wasn't me that time

love it quasi!

mind you, there are others who would want more...