What category?

[honeysucklerose]

I basically consider this a story of masturbation but since there's no such category am unsure of where to submit it.

Any suggestions?

Feedback is welcome. (Dons armor over ego.)


The Unfinished Flight


Edited to remove story for re-working. Will return with link when submitted.

 

[English Lady]

Well personally i think it might class as an exhibitionist/voyeur story You do not say anyone is watching, or listening but there COULD be someone watching.

 

[hiddenself]

I agree with EL's suggestion.

As for the story itself...

Spell check? Editing?

"stewardice" should be "stewardess"

"It's smooth hardness" should be "Its smooth..."
It's = it is (you're = you are, etc)
The pronouns are "its," "your" etc.

On the other hand, "the planes lavatory" should be the "plane's lavatory"

You need to read up on possessives.

"The tightness in her own loins had pulsed"
I'm not sure about this one. It seemed a little weird. Tightness pulsing? Me thinks that the pursuit of originality in description should not lead to puzzling constructions.

It was a nice little story. It didn't do too much for me. I found it rather timid and too much of the "romance novel" type -- too fluffy. But that's my personal taste.

hs

 

[honeysucklerose]

Thanks for the feedback. Exhibitionism it will be.

I read once that authors should sit on their stories and rework them before finalizing them. I think this must be true.

There is something lacking I will try to add.

TY for the punctuation tips. I'm distracted by poor punctuation myself when reading and would have been embarassed to have those booboos slip by.