Want feedback Please (Have First story up)

[Boominatang]

Hey I've just one day recently decided to look for a place to find erotic stories, not even for posting, and my first story was a bit rough around the egdes when it comes to plot devolpment, it's very raunch oriented. I have yet to figure out how to work the coding on this forum and I don't feel like trying to post links that just wont work but my story is in the story circle part of the forum. I would love soom feedback and keep an eye out for my other stories that have a bit more porpouse.