Varian pimps her porn

[Varian P]

In the great Literotica tradition of shameless self-promotion, I'm starting this thread with the hope of luring a few new readers to my tall tales.

And though it's not the main goal of the thread, sincere feedback and critiques are always appreciated.

 

[Varian P]

For starters, I think I'll kick off by highlighting a story I wrote a while back under a different pen name. It's by far the most blatantly "porny" thing I've ever written. High on titillation, low on plot. And, what do you know, it has more votes and comments than anything else I've written.

Lord Melchior a non-consent/reluctance tale way at the sensual fantasy end of that category spectrum.



A few PCs from the story:

5Excellent
05/08/05 by LadyLeigh in USA
Perhaps my favorite story on this site. I hope you write more!

5just delicious!
01/22/05 by Anonymous in USA
Very creative and very well written. The author accomplished a teasing buildup to the climax of the story in a very effective manner. I loved ancient setting, and the author's vivid description of the action in the tale. Truly enjoyed it!!

5Magical, simply magical.
12/20/05 by Anonymous in United States of America
Kudos to the Man who can make a gal soak her seat from reading a story. You're an extremely gifted writer able to evoke vivid powerful erotic images in one's mind...Bravo!...More!

4mmm
11/12/04 by Anonymous in U.S.
Well written, highly erotic...very creative setup. It has potential and interest even without the sexuality of the piece. Very well done! (and it provided a hot climax, thank you!)

5Wow
09/26/04 by pureNticement in usa
I'm reading this story and all i can say is...wow. I felt every word and now i'm wondering if i could have taken such a night so well. I look forward to reading more of your stories

5Where can I find Lord Melchior?
08/27/06 by Anonymous
Lovely, absolutely lovely. Lucky Rasha.

 

[NorCalGirl]

I'm off to read your porny story

And will add my humble "Not a Lit author" thoughts later!
* * *

And .... I'm back!

I left an abbreviated version of this comment under the story itself. I have read most (maybe not all?) of your stories posted under this name, so it was a nice treat to have something "new" by you to read today.

My thoughts: You covered several genres in Lord Melchior: first time, group sex, anal, and non-consent/reluctance. I might even be missing a genre or two. What is impressive is that you hit the high notes of each category, which I think is very tough to do.

For example, it seems to me that "first time" stories usually have some element of nervousness, anxiety about the unknown, and on the female's part, fear over the repercussions of becoming a sexual being, the "will he still respect me in the morning?" component. With the virgin female/experienced male dynamic, I want to see the male as a gentle guide into the pleasures of sex. Since it's fantasy, I'd like to see the female reach an orgasm on her first time. So, I mark this story as "check, check, check."

(BTW, I couldn't tell if it was the narrator's first time with a woman, but I suspect it was. However, his "first time" seemed to take a back seat to Rasha's, and that was okay with me.)

Next, for me, the best non-consent/reluctance stories embody a gradual lessening of resistance into acceptance, and then enjoyment of the act/full participation. If written poorly, it can seem totally unrealistic, as in one moment the woman is scared to death and being painfully violated, and then the next, she melts and is totally enjoying it. I liked the gentle pacing of your story, the gradual build up from step to step. So when Rasha looks trustingly up at the Master, it feels realistic.

Anal - a story in this category has to basically sweet talk me into considering it sexy. It can be done, but it ain't easy. Should have known you could pull it off. Again, the key for me was Rasha's enjoyment of the act, and of course, the fact that the guard didn't immediately shove his entirety into her. Good combination of fantasy and realism.

I especially liked the ending, of all of them in a nice warm bath, gently washing Rasha.

 

[mjl2010]

I read Lord Melchior. It has to be the best non-consent story I've ever read. I'm glad you took your time to tell the tale. So many would have rushed through it, ended up with a page or a page and half and been done. This truly deserved the full telling you gave it. Well done.

Oh. I enjoyed how the story was told from the servants point of view rather than Rasha's or the Masters. That was good and I kept wondering if Z was going to get drawn into the action.

Um. One complaint though. Some of your paragraphs are long. My lazy eyes have trouble with that. My only complaint though.

Voted.

MJL

 

[Varian P]

NorCalGirl,

Be careful, I'm getting awfully used to your kind comments on my stories. I may have to check myself into a twelve-step program if you ever abandon me!

It's gratifying to hear you enjoyed the story, but especially nice to get such detailed thoughts on why the piece worked for you. You made a quip about your 'non-Lit-author' comments, but it's just as instructive, hearing why a story works for someone on a psychological/emotional/erotic level, as it is getting insights into where a story is working or falling short on a technical/plot/structural level. I think people are sometimes shy about offering crits or feedback, and you certainly shouldn't be.

Thanks again for taking the time to not only PC, but comment here as well.

-Varian

 

[mellowgyrl]

I don't post much (still very new and don't want to step on any toes) but I had to comment on your story...

Wow! Wow! Wow! That was an amazing piece of work you have there! Very well written and thoroughly enjoyable!

Oh yeah...I voted too! Nice job!

 

[Varian P]

I read Lord Melchior. It has to be the best non-consent story I've ever read. I'm glad you took your time to tell the tale. So many would have rushed through it, ended up with a page or a page and half and been done. This truly deserved the full telling you gave it. Well done.

Oh. I enjoyed how the story was told from the servants point of view rather than Rasha's or the Masters. That was good and I kept wondering if Z was going to get drawn into the action.

Um. One complaint though. Some of your paragraphs are long. My lazy eyes have trouble with that. My only complaint though.

Voted.

MJL

Wow, what a compliment! Thank you.

I'm glad you liked my little narrative conceit, using Zacheus to tell the story. At the time, I thought I'd write a part two, where he gets put more in Rasha's role, but I got distracted by other projects.

Thanks for your tip re: the long paragraphs. I do try to keep that in mind, these days.

Again, thank you.

Varian

 

[summerd]

You wrote Lord Melchoir? yay! a Varian P to read!

So jeez it's time again to put more incense and candles on the Varian P altar that I built on the writer's shelf? (Imaginary but maybe if I had room. . .)

Okay.

As far as I'm concerned you're the best writer at the site, one of the best, period.

I come wandering over to literotica at least once a day to see if there's more After up. And I feel distinctly let down when I don't see the little yellow N on the list of Varian P list of stuff. I know it's Christmas time and all. but, please, take pity on an addict!

 

[Varian P]

You wrote Lord Melchoir? yay! a Varian P to read!

So jeez it's time again to put more incense and candles on the Varian P altar that I built on the writer's shelf? (Imaginary but maybe if I had room. . .)

Okay.

As far as I'm concerned you're the best writer at the site, one of the best, period.

I come wandering over to literotica at least once a day to see if there's more After up. And I feel distinctly let down when I don't see the little yellow N on the list of Varian P list of stuff. I know it's Christmas time and all. but, please, take pity on an addict!

What?! The altar's imaginary?

I hope you enjoy "Lord Melchior"--it's pretty low on the plot and pathos, unlike most of the rest of my stuff.

As for new stuff, I'm trying! I am! I'm this close to finishing the penultimate chapter of After, but damn, talk about blood from a stone. What is it with me and wrapping up long stories? I think I have a subconscious phobia about parting with beloved characters. Or they sense they're about to come to their journey and conspire to turn their backs on me as I near the final stretch.

But seriously, I bet I'll post it tonight or tomorrow. And hopefully the final chapter won't be far behind.

Lovely hearing from you.

-V

 

[Varian P]

I come wandering over to literotica at least once a day to see if there's more After up. And I feel distinctly let down when I don't see the little yellow N on the list of Varian P list of stuff. I know it's Christmas time and all. but, please, take pity on an addict!

Whew! I submitted the latest chapter last night. Hopefully it'll be up soon.

One more to go...

 

[NorCalGirl]

Whew! I submitted the latest chapter last night. Hopefully it'll be up soon.

One more to go...

I can hardly wait!

 

[Varian P]

first pimp of the new year

For those of you who resolved to read more porn in 2008, perhaps I can tempt you with a brief tale of abduction and violation:

Awake

Since others are far better at pitching my stuff than I am, I'll try to woo you with a few reader's comments:

5Very hot
12/08/05 by CamisoleInSilk in France
it deserves higher than a five on the kink scale.

5WOW!
10/06/05 by SpecialK in Canada
This was the hottest story I've read in a long time! What'd I'd give for someone to take me like that! Man oh man!

5A guilty pleasure and a secret wish
01/12/06 by shereads
If I say this often enough, someday I'll be able to admit it without flinching: I like rape fantasies. I like rape fantasies. I've had rape fantasies since I figured out why Mighty Mouse's nemesis only kidnapped girl mice. More accurately, I enjoy rape fantasies that are written with sensitivity and depth. There aren't a lot of those. You are one of the handful of authors in the BDSM and non-consent categories that I read without hesitation. Thank you for taking some of the guilt out of the pleasure.

5What a wonderful rush
12/19/07 by BrnEyedBeauty in USA
I've often had rape fantasies but haven't had the courage to post about them here. I'm older now and fully accepting of myself. That being said... I'm jealous of the "victim" in the story. I wish I had someone want me with that intensity. That desire. I will definitely add this to my favorites and look for more of your stories. Thank you.

5Wow
12/07/07 by lynnakimana in USA
Your going in my favorites. This was absolutely the best; the description, the atmosphere, the setting; I'm almost jealous

 

[mjl2010]

Read Awake. Nice surprise at the end. I got a chuckle when I saw it was her own perverted fantasy/dream that took place. Or was it? Ah Tequila.

MJL

 

[Varian P]

Read Awake. Nice surprise at the end. I got a chuckle when I saw it was her own perverted fantasy/dream that took place. Or was it? Ah Tequila.

MJL

Tequila, indeed. You saw the opening paragraph where I said this was an autobiographical, hundred-percent true story, right?

Thanks for the read and the note, MJL.

 

[manyeyedhydra]

The subject wasn't my cup of tea but very well written.

I like the ambiguity of the ending.

I'm guessing there's a very fine line to walk with this kind of tale between inflicting so much pain/humiliation on the girl it's no longer comfortable to read or the other totally unbelievable extreme of having her become his adoring slut. This one sits in the right place I think.

 

[Varian P]

The subject wasn't my cup of tea but very well written.

I like the ambiguity of the ending.

I'm guessing there's a very fine line to walk with this kind of tale between inflicting so much pain/humiliation on the girl it's no longer comfortable to read or the other totally unbelievable extreme of having her become his adoring slut. This one sits in the right place I think.

I appreciate you giving the story a look, especially given it's not your preferred subject matter.

My stories cover a broad spectrum of the non-con category, from the fantasy of reluctance to the trauma of rape, but even at the fluffier end, I try to work in a modicum of real-ish human responses to what's going on.

Many thanks for the compliments.

-Varian

 

[toffeegyrl]

well done, varian. Very well done. *eyeing top drawer of nightstand*

 

[manyeyedhydra]

My stories cover a broad spectrum of the non-con category, from the fantasy of reluctance to the trauma of rape, but even at the fluffier end, I try to work in a modicum of real-ish human responses to what's going on.

Have you thought about adding a non-human dimension? Tentacles is a bit of a cliche, but some other supernatural entity doing the forcing.

I don't mind writing about male victims as being unable to resist the seduction is clear fantasy and twists the usual roles. I'd be less comfortable about using a female victim because I'd be worried about not getting it right on that line and ending up in traumatic rape/snuff territory.

What is acceptable/unacceptable for this kind of story? Should it make a difference what sex the victim is?

 

[Varian P]

well done, varian. Very well done. *eyeing top drawer of nightstand*

Always glad to force someone to resort to the treasures of the nightstand.

Thanks for the lovely compliment.

-Varian

 

[Varian P]

Have you thought about adding a non-human dimension? Tentacles is a bit of a cliche, but some other supernatural entity doing the forcing.

Personally, nah. I'm just not all that compelled by anything supernatural or non-human. It's all about the psychology of human interaction, for me. The one story I have that's got a supernatural element is still a human in pursuit of revenge manifesting as a kind of ghost through witchcraft.

I don't mind writing about male victims as being unable to resist the seduction is clear fantasy and twists the usual roles. I'd be less comfortable about using a female victim because I'd be worried about not getting it right on that line and ending up in traumatic rape/snuff territory.

What is acceptable/unacceptable for this kind of story? Should it make a difference what sex the victim is?

Excellent point and question--things I spend a lot of time pondering, and have been writing about in my usual verbose way on a couple threads in the AH (Underage Incest Fantasies & Some Dead Horses Must Be Flogged).

In addition to the fantasy-level non-con like "Lord Melchior" and "Awake" I've written more serious stories portraying both women and men as victims of sexual violence, much more in the traumatic rape/snuff territory. Those aren't geared to arouse, but to explore an ugly element all-too common in human interactions.

My take is that it's morally tricky territory, writing erotica where the titillation arises from sexual violation. As writers, we have to decide what we're comfortable writing, or when it's worth writing something we're distinctly NOT comfortable with.

As for what's acceptable or unacceptable? That's so subjective, you'd probably get a different answer from every person you asked. I imagine the conversation would run along lines similar to that AH thread on incest fantasies, though probably somewhat less heated.