gordo12
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I’ve never used Grammarly, or any similar program, and I doubt I ever will. But that’s personal choice and if other writers find it helpful why shouldn’t they use it? I like to rely on my own ability and, if in any doubt about something, I check with google. That doesn’t mean mistakes don’t slip through to a published story of mine but very few.
As the person who made the comment in which the word “discombobulated” was used I just want to clarify a couple of things Gordo seems to have misunderstood about what I wrote. After reading some comments on another thread I decided to read one of his stories and although the only category we have something in common is Romance I decided to read, for some unknown reason, his only story in Erotic Horror. I’ve copied my comment below and as you can see I gave it 5.
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“That was fun.. I don’t read horror stories or watch horror movies because I find them humorous and I know that’s not supposed to be the case. So for the first half of the story I was laughing and then the tone altered as she changed from the poor girl raped by the devil to becoming evil herself. The bit with the snake was revolting, which I’m sure you intended, and got your point across.
I did enjoy the storybut, and I’m possibly/probably wrong, a sequel would have to be good and not turn out to be a cliche and detrimental to this story. I hope I’ve explained that correctly.
A few mistakes which an editor would have picked up on regarding using the wrong word, spelling and punctuation but nothing serious.
I never thought I’d see the word “discombobulated” in a story on this sitefor that.
Having dealt with the pro’s it’s only fair to deal with the con’s. I don’t come from the southern states but I have spent a lot of time there and have to agree with a previous comment in respect of “ya’ll” and the use of colloquial outside of speech, which kept interrupting my concentrating on reading.
But, on the whole, I did enjoy it and thought it worth a 5.”
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I think Gordo misunderstood when I wrote I never thought I’d see the word “discombulated” in a story on this site. I gave it a thumbs up for him having the courage to use a word which I know the meaning of (although that’s obvious because I made the comment) but which I personally think many readers would have to look up. Perhaps I’m wrong about that but we’ll never know.
I don’t understand the comment “apparently that was a milestone for him.” Perhaps he thought it was the first time I’d seen an unusual (?) word used in that way. Which would be a misconception because I have, on many occasions, seen a word in a story and wondered why the writer used it. I would think many people, not just writers, will have done the same. Perhaps I should have made myself clearer and the the misunderstanding wouldn’t have occurred.
But, as you see, overall I liked the story which is why I gave it 5. I hope that’s cleared up my thinking behind Gordo using “discombobulated.”
First, thank you for the kind comments and score you gave the story. There won't be a sequel. The category hasn't got enough response for me to spend the time. I was going to expand it into series of stories where Albin rights social wrongs in an evil way, which was the underpinning of the "Evil" story. Not that it was supposed to be. The original vision was a battle between good and evil. Good was supposed to win. Ha!

I did understand your comment on discombobulated. I'm not sure why I used "milestone" when I wrote about the comment; it just jumped into my head while I was writing.
I agree with you on the language issue. A couple of other authors here brought up the same thing when they commented. I agonized over the choice while I was writing it. I wrote it one way and didn't like it. I changed it and didn't like it. I changed it back and still didn't like it, so I left it. So that you know, I'll use the slang in dialogue and keep the normal words in the story as you and the others have suggested.
Again thanks for the kind words.