hbojohnson
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- Dec 3, 2005
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I've been a long-time reader of literotica and wrote a story here a little over three years ago. Recently I decided to write another story which I'm about halfway through.
But first, I decided to update my original story. The comments on the first story were incredibly helpful and pointed out the story's weaknesses. Hopefully I've ameliorated most of the problems now.
I am a perfectionist though. If you have any suggestions, I'd still consider incorporating them and updating the story again. In fact, I'd love to hear feedback of any sort as I'm still developing my style and this is my first real piece of fiction (pornographic or otherwise). The story is a revenge tale about a man who discovers his fiance's innocence is a facade.
I've submitted the edited story, but I'm not sure how long it takes for an update to make it to the site. If you see this soon after it's posted, the first line of the original story read:
"Tom's wedding was less than two weeks away when he found out what Susan, the love of his life, was going to do him. He gave her credit, the plan was pure genius."
And the updated version:
"Tom's wedding was less than two weeks away when he found out."
Here's the link:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=231332
But first, I decided to update my original story. The comments on the first story were incredibly helpful and pointed out the story's weaknesses. Hopefully I've ameliorated most of the problems now.
I am a perfectionist though. If you have any suggestions, I'd still consider incorporating them and updating the story again. In fact, I'd love to hear feedback of any sort as I'm still developing my style and this is my first real piece of fiction (pornographic or otherwise). The story is a revenge tale about a man who discovers his fiance's innocence is a facade.
I've submitted the edited story, but I'm not sure how long it takes for an update to make it to the site. If you see this soon after it's posted, the first line of the original story read:
"Tom's wedding was less than two weeks away when he found out what Susan, the love of his life, was going to do him. He gave her credit, the plan was pure genius."
And the updated version:
"Tom's wedding was less than two weeks away when he found out."
Here's the link:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=231332
