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Dixon Carter Lee said:
And of course trying to figure out when the hetero sapians came into being
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And of course trying to figure out when the hetero sapians came into being
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No 'fence Todd, but it's in second person. I absolutely DETEST second person.
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Yes I did, Never, and I detested every moment of it. Of course, I never read it. 
KillerMuffin said:Yes I did, Never, and I detested every moment of it. Of course, I never read it.
Sorry Killa, what can ya expect from a loiser like me who hasn't a clue and nobody would answer my thread on what story they would like to have hear. that thread is like on page 140something by now with 2 views.
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Hey, Todd, you don't make stories by committee, they tend to reek like onion and garlic breath. You create stories based on your own intuition and your own creativity. Whether or not anyone likes them after that is up to them.
There is a thread on the editors board by lancelot knight which will tell you that second person is one of the basic mistakes writers make. Don't do it.
This has nothing to do with your story, how good it was, how bad it was, or whether or not you tell a fine tale or how your voice sounded.
This has only to do with my personal preference. I- me myself and I only- have a preference in the point of view sector of story writing. I prefer first person or third person. I even have a preference for tense. I prefer past tense over present tense. That's me. My preference. It's also something you'll find most people prefer as well. You've alienated your male audience with second person because they're not female. You've alienated at least half your female audience with second person because they wouldn't react like the "you" in your story did.
Now, this has jack shit to do with your story and how good it is. All this has to do with is that it was in second person and therefore I didn't listen to it all the way through. It was just too painful. Not to mention I'm not a flightly missish coward. I would have kicked your ass all up and down that seven eleven parking lot if you'da tried that with me.
Since I didn't listen to your story beyond the intro, I have no accurate opinion on it's quality. Ahehgeeya?
I don't participate in those "what do you want out of a story?" discussions either. Don't make them don't take part in them. You ask three different people you will get three different answers. YOU write your story and people with either like it or they won't. You know what the general literotica audience wants, they want sex stories, and you have a list of categories that you can "niche" your stories in. You wrote and recorded a non-consent story, from what I heard. That's perfect for the site. You just did it in second person, which some people not all people- I only speak for myself- don't like.
Do another one. Do it in second person if you want to. Or don't if you don't want to. It's YOUR story.
There is a thread on the editors board by lancelot knight which will tell you that second person is one of the basic mistakes writers make. Don't do it.
This has nothing to do with your story, how good it was, how bad it was, or whether or not you tell a fine tale or how your voice sounded.
This has only to do with my personal preference. I- me myself and I only- have a preference in the point of view sector of story writing. I prefer first person or third person. I even have a preference for tense. I prefer past tense over present tense. That's me. My preference. It's also something you'll find most people prefer as well. You've alienated your male audience with second person because they're not female. You've alienated at least half your female audience with second person because they wouldn't react like the "you" in your story did.
Now, this has jack shit to do with your story and how good it is. All this has to do with is that it was in second person and therefore I didn't listen to it all the way through. It was just too painful. Not to mention I'm not a flightly missish coward. I would have kicked your ass all up and down that seven eleven parking lot if you'da tried that with me.
Since I didn't listen to your story beyond the intro, I have no accurate opinion on it's quality. Ahehgeeya?
I don't participate in those "what do you want out of a story?" discussions either. Don't make them don't take part in them. You ask three different people you will get three different answers. YOU write your story and people with either like it or they won't. You know what the general literotica audience wants, they want sex stories, and you have a list of categories that you can "niche" your stories in. You wrote and recorded a non-consent story, from what I heard. That's perfect for the site. You just did it in second person, which some people not all people- I only speak for myself- don't like.
Do another one. Do it in second person if you want to. Or don't if you don't want to. It's YOUR story.
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I've never bought into the notion that one form of person or tense is more 'alienating' than another.
However, all the stories I've written are in first or third person past tense for the simple reason that it's that what my (imaginary) audience is used to; anything else feels 'off' to them and they'll concentrate on the style over the substance of the piece.
However, all the stories I've written are in first or third person past tense for the simple reason that it's that what my (imaginary) audience is used to; anything else feels 'off' to them and they'll concentrate on the style over the substance of the piece.
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Kind of like faith.
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A second person story written especially for Never:
You walked into the room and lit up my world. I've never seen anyone as utterly gorgeous as you are. Your elegant demeanor was as comfortable to you in your tuxedo as it is in your nakedness. I gasp for breath, my eyes locking on your sex. How could anyone not adore the throbbing muscle of love that you had? Your tumescent member is something women all over the world yearn for and write poetry to. I felt quite faint, knowing that you and your sparkling shaft of joy would soon be taking me to the highest of dizzying orgasmic heights.
Feel alienated yet? Or do you feel totally in sync with "you?"
You walked into the room and lit up my world. I've never seen anyone as utterly gorgeous as you are. Your elegant demeanor was as comfortable to you in your tuxedo as it is in your nakedness. I gasp for breath, my eyes locking on your sex. How could anyone not adore the throbbing muscle of love that you had? Your tumescent member is something women all over the world yearn for and write poetry to. I felt quite faint, knowing that you and your sparkling shaft of joy would soon be taking me to the highest of dizzying orgasmic heights.
Feel alienated yet? Or do you feel totally in sync with "you?"
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Killer, I've never read a story about 'me,' yet I always feel as though I'm the main character (in a well writen story that is).
I've been male and female and black and white and human and alien. Yes, I feel in 'sync with the character because I become the character. In fact, I'd enjoy being this character because having women all over the world lust after my muscle of love sounds pretty freakin' neat.
I've been male and female and black and white and human and alien. Yes, I feel in 'sync with the character because I become the character. In fact, I'd enjoy being this character because having women all over the world lust after my muscle of love sounds pretty freakin' neat.
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How do you do it? Make me laugh when you're poking at me?
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Never said:sexy-girl:
"todd im too scared to listen being a lesbian and all i dont think it would be my type of thing hehe ... but well done for doing it brave of you
'Scared to listen'?
Don't knock something before you've tried it.
how do you know i/we havet tried it never
sorry todd im sure you have a lovely powerful voice that makes most women tremble with excitement ... but i prefer a different sounding voice to make me tremble
I didn't ask in my thread what type of story people wanted written.
I asked for any story here on lit that somebody wanted read.
But oh well I figured out the audio section is more for the men to listen to the women moan and orgasm and get themselves off.
It seems that the women could care less if Lit had an audio section because every thread asking th women what stories, they wanted to here. How they like so and so. The women go silent.
Again proving the women hate audio. or at least are above telling what they want out of audio
I asked for any story here on lit that somebody wanted read.
But oh well I figured out the audio section is more for the men to listen to the women moan and orgasm and get themselves off.
It seems that the women could care less if Lit had an audio section because every thread asking th women what stories, they wanted to here. How they like so and so. The women go silent.
Again proving the women hate audio. or at least are above telling what they want out of audio
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KillerMuffin:
"How do you do it? Make me laugh when you're poking at me?"
You're laughing at me, are you? Well, that makes me feel all warm and cuddly inside..
Oh, I was being (semi) serious, you know. I assume that if I were male I'd be hung like a horse, now if you wrote a story about some dude with an Oscar Meyer wiener I don't know if I could get into that.
"How do you do it? Make me laugh when you're poking at me?"
You're laughing at me, are you? Well, that makes me feel all warm and cuddly inside..
Oh, I was being (semi) serious, you know. I assume that if I were male I'd be hung like a horse, now if you wrote a story about some dude with an Oscar Meyer wiener I don't know if I could get into that.
Re: Uh Todd?
Well If I must expalin myself it must mean I am a virgin.
Lets see, Previously I had licked, nibbled, eatne you to an orgasm, therefore your pussy mound should be dripping in wetness. Not wanting to enter you with a dry cock, I slide myself in the dripping lips coating my cock with your own wetness until it is thoroughly luberacated.
I can see where my virginity was confusing
Angel said:"I slide myself into your dripping wetness until it is wet"
Well If I must expalin myself it must mean I am a virgin.
Lets see, Previously I had licked, nibbled, eatne you to an orgasm, therefore your pussy mound should be dripping in wetness. Not wanting to enter you with a dry cock, I slide myself in the dripping lips coating my cock with your own wetness until it is thoroughly luberacated.
I can see where my virginity was confusing
