Tinder with incest twist - suggestions for the story pace please

[TheOtherTeacher]

I've got an idea for a story about a Tinder-like app that actually autobooks the hotel room for you. You don't know who you're meeting. you just get a message like
"MAN AGED 47 WANTS TO PAY 95% OF A ROOM AT ROYAL ALBERT HOTEL (1.2 miles from current location) TONIGHT. COST FOR YOU - $22.55 (including fees)" (No photos or anything except these details)

So my idea is that the female protagonist accidently finds herself in a room with her estranged father. And...well...it's an incest story.

I need your suggestions for pacing.

IDEA 1 -
First time using APP, person is unrelated. Standard male/female sex scene.
Second time - Father.

This gets to the point quite quickly, but still has a non-incest scene that could put off incest only readers.


IDEA 2 - (I'm leaning towards this)
First time using APP, person is unrelated. Standard male/female sex scene.
Second time - Female cousin.
Third time - Father.

This makes the story a bit longer and involves more incest.

IDEA 3 -
First and only time - Father.

This cuts straight to the point. But I feel it would lose build-up.

What do you think?

 

[dodgeboy2]

Well you can still build the story up maybe the 1st time they fight the desire and then they actually don't or can't do it maybe within the same chapter they meet a 2nd time and give in to temptation, from there you can then build on it for more chapters like maybe the 1st time they only do petting and maybe getting themselves off while they both watch each other building to more and more

 

[SteelPoint]

Excellent idea, even if the incestuous angle has been suggested more than once before. I put something similar up a few months ago:
https://forum.literotica.com/threads/yes-they-like-pina-coladas.1611814/

 

[DarkSollat]

As enjoyer of lesbian smut I like no 2 the best.

 

[Britva415]

You could make clear that this isn't the first time the person has used the app, but you aren't obligated to provide sex scenes for the previous non-incest encounters. Just cut to the chase when she meets her father.

 

[Rob_Royale]

I think she's a regular. She's very into the lifestyle. There's something about sex with strangers that excites her beyond anything else she's known.

One night her father's friend is bragging about the night he spent with an amazing woman and he gets her contact info.

The lead up is first the daughter chatting about her escapades with friends and then her meeting with dad's pal. This should convey just how wanton and slutty she really is.

When she meets her dad she sees his car in the parking lot before ever going in. She had her moral dilemma and gets past it before she ever opens the door.

When she walks in she's in full seduction mode.

 

[LoneMilf]

Cute idea with the app

However, I think you will need to devote some space to establishing why they would both still want to go through with it when they are accidently matched. This will be much more important for the suspension of disbelief than the specific pacing.

 

[lovecraft68]

When she meets her dad she sees his car in the parking lot before ever going in. She had her moral dilemma and gets past it before she ever opens the door.

When she walks in she's in full seduction mode.

I'm not a fan of this angle. Takes away the shock value and some slow burn, um, what now.

I do like that she does this often which explains why she no longer worries about meeting anyone she knows because she's become so comfortable with it.

 

[LargoKitt]

I've got an idea for a story about a Tinder-like app that actually autobooks the hotel room for you. You don't know who you're meeting. you just get a message like
"MAN AGED 47 WANTS TO PAY 95% OF A ROOM AT ROYAL ALBERT HOTEL (1.2 miles from current location) TONIGHT. COST FOR YOU - $22.55 (including fees)" (No photos or anything except these details)

So my idea is that the female protagonist accidently finds herself in a room with her estranged father. And...well...it's an incest story.

I need your suggestions for pacing.

IDEA 1 -
First time using APP, person is unrelated. Standard male/female sex scene.
Second time - Father.

This gets to the point quite quickly, but still has a non-incest scene that could put off incest only readers.


IDEA 2 - (I'm leaning towards this)
First time using APP, person is unrelated. Standard male/female sex scene.
Second time - Female cousin.
Third time - Father.

This makes the story a bit longer and involves more incest.

IDEA 3 -
First and only time - Father.

This cuts straight to the point. But I feel it would lose build-up.

What do you think?

You get some mileage out of having them not know they are related for a while. Absentee father. Working a bit with the older/younger thing. Each reminds the other of someone. The sex is terrific and she enjoys the more experienced touch. Is the reveal in the second time thy meet? Why might they go ahead and have sex anyway?

 

[Rob_Royale]

I'm not a fan of this angle. Takes away the shock value and some slow burn, um, what now.

I getcha. I thought of this because in my mind's eye, I see two completely shocked people meeting in a hotel room. Odds are, there is no act two. Because they see each other's reaction and then guilt and shame set in. If one of them is past that, I can see the story moving forward. Just my opinion.

 

[TheOtherTeacher]

My idea so far.
Girl is new to the app. She's had a long dry spell and her friend (who uses the app regularly) suggests she tries it.

App lets you choose what percentage of the hotel room to pay, to a minimum of 5%. So men pay 95%, women 5% (gay/lesbian couples 51/49%).
BUT if you don't arrive, or leave the room before 6am the new day, you pay the full amount. PLUS a large cancellation fee to discourage cancelling or leaving early.

She has a couple of successful meet-ups. (Non-incest).
She gets the offer to stay in the most expensive, fancy hotel in the city (paying just 5%) so says yes.

She arrives at the room, and finds her estranged father there. Hasn't spoken to him for 2 years since the divorce. It's a surprise for both of them.

She can't leave because she can't afford to pay for the hotel room (plus a large cancellation fee).

He won't pay the whole bill and let her leave because he can finally speak to his daughter who has been avoiding him for 2 years.

Both of them came into the hotel room horny.

Maybe some revelation that the divorce was because the wife/mum hadn't slept with him for 5+ years and he didn't want to cheat. Maybe another reason why the mum was bad, not the dad.

Maybe a revelation that her best friend (who uses the app regularly) has already slept with him (through the app) and didn't tell main character.

Maybe they go to bed (no sex) but she sees her dad's large excited cock and feels horny.

The sex is more of an unexpected moment, rather than a preplanned seduction, but both of them get super into it and enjoy it far more than they ever expected.

End with them both still using the app, but also meeting up normally to speak and fuck.

 

[JulioGomez8]

Why not add a ‘blindfold’ element and then towards the end, it comes off and she’s shocked

 

[AlinaX]

She uses the app a few times. The first couple of times, she's quite conservative, putting preferences in her profile for ideal husband material, but this doesn't really work for her. It's too much like a one night stand, and anyway she has an itch for something new and different.

She opens her preferences, daring to explore her bi side and get with a girl for the first time, and that's actually a lot of fun; but she also has an itch to try a man, an older man.

So when she does end up face to face with her father, she realises that she basically set herself up. It's a shock, absolutely, but also a horribly exciting possibility...