This might sound weird...

[Jenny_Jackson]

But I just deleted six paragraphs of raw sex from my Halloween story. I hated doing it, but all the bumping and humping seemed like it was over coming the point of the story.

Do you think that's weird?

 

[werdsmith]

you can send em to me, I'll take good care of them.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

you can send em to me, I'll take good care of them.

What would you do with an oriental threesome?

 

[Darkniciad]

I've done the same thing numerous times, even axing whole scenes and pulling out the plot points, dropping them somehow into non-sexual situations.

Nothing weird about it. If you read back through it, and the sex just feels extraneous, or like too much of a roadbump, out comes the katana and KIAAAIII!

 

[cheerful_deviant]

But I just deleted six paragraphs of raw sex from my Halloween story. I hated doing it, but all the bumping and humping seemed like it was over coming the point of the story.

Do you think that's weird?

I suppose it depends on what you're trying to write.

If it's a pure stroke peice, then erasing a sex scene makens little or no scense. If you're trying to write a complete story with a plot, characters and everthing then if the scene is not serving a purpose it's just in the way.

 

[werdsmith]

What would you do with an oriental threesome?

is this a trick question?

 

[cheerful_deviant]

What would you do with an oriental threesome?

Die happy.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Die happy.

I actually kept the ending...

"When Neela arrived back at the dome, the two oriental women were greedily lapping cum from Willum’s chest and from each other. Willum lay there exhausted and unable to move. The women kissed each other deeply and then rose, waved and said happily, “Happy Halloween,” as the headed for the door."

That's all that's left of the entire scene.

 

[TheeGoatPig]

I've cut scenes because it was too much too fast. Sometimes you just have to slow the story down and let it retain a natural flow, and too much sex will speed things up and make it feel all wrong, leaving you empty inside.

 

[cheerful_deviant]

I actually kept the ending...

"When Neela arrived back at the dome, the two oriental women were greedily lapping cum from Willum’s chest and from each other. Willum lay there exhausted and unable to move. The women kissed each other deeply and then rose, waved and said happily, “Happy Halloween,” as the headed for the door."

That's all that's left of the entire scene.

Where's that envy thread?

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

...waved and said happily, “Happy Halloween,...”

I don't like that. I need to repair the happily, happy thing

 

[Weird Harold]

No, JJ, I don't think it's weird -- unless you consider authorly as synonymous with weird. p

If it's a pure stroke peice, then erasing a sex scene makens little or no scense. If you're trying to write a complete story with a plot, characters and everthing then if the scene is not serving a purpose it's just in the way.

I know it doesn't seem to make any sense, but I have read "pure stroke" stories that had "gratuitous sex" scenes in them -- as in sex scenes that made no sense in relation to the sex scenes in the rest of story.

I've got two stories "in progress" -- if you can call being stalled on them for nearly two years being "in progress" -- that 'need' sex scenes but I can't seem to make them work without seeming gratuitious. The sex is needed for the story concept but I just can't find a way/place to include it.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I've cut scenes because it was too much too fast. Sometimes you just have to slow the story down and let it retain a natural flow, and too much sex will speed things up and make it feel all wrong, leaving you empty inside.

Yanno, Three,

Slowing the thing down wasn't the problem. The problem was the sex scene was slowing the story down. The story has sex but sex is only a vehicle to make the plot work. But the point of the story is about something else entirly. This scene occurs near the end of the story. I've spent 2500 words building up to the story climax. Then this scene just seemed like it was "too much of a good thing" and not about the point of the story at all.

 

[TheeGoatPig]

Yanno, Three,

Slowing the thing down wasn't the problem. The problem was the sex scene was slowing the story down. The story has sex but sex is only a vehicle to make the plot work. But the point of the story is about something else entirly. This scene occurs near the end of the story. I've spent 2500 words building up to the story climax. Then this scene just seemed like it was "too much of a good thing" and not about the point of the story at all.

I understand. I was just agreeing that I've had to cut sex scenes that didn't fit. Just my reason was a little different.

And there's no R in my name

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I understand. I was just agreeing that I've had to cut sex scenes that didn't fit. Just my reason was a little different.

And there's no R in my name

Oops sorry

 

[Liar]

What would you do with an oriental threesome?

Um...

 

[SeaCat]

Funny you should ask this.

I started a story centered around a sex scene. Then the story grew. It took on a life of it's own. Now as I'm editing the story I find myself rewriting the sex scene. It has become something of an embelishment and not the core part of the story. I may end up cutting the scene out entirely, we'll see what happens. It's been known to happen.

Cat

 

[Roxanne Appleby]

Hopefully you saved the copy!

You never know when and where some good fucking and sucking will come in handy . . .

 

[nyte_byrd]

But I just deleted six paragraphs of raw sex from my Halloween story. I hated doing it, but all the bumping and humping seemed like it was over coming the point of the story.

Do you think that's weird?

Not weird at all. It happened in the first story I submitted here: got finished and said "Hey, where's the story?"... it was all hump and bump. I wound up keeping one sex scene and totally rewriting everything else.

 

[nyte_byrd]

I've got two stories "in progress" -- if you can call being stalled on them for nearly two years being "in progress" -- that 'need' sex scenes but I can't seem to make them work without seeming gratuitious. The sex is needed for the story concept but I just can't find a way/place to include it.

If you figure out the solution to this one, please let me know! My Halloween horror submission is all but finished, but there's not a single line of sex in it (no good for Lit., I know). I've got a couple of sections marked where sex scenes could fit in smoothly, but they aren't *really* neccessary so it's tough to figure out how to include them.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Hopefully you saved the copy!

You never know when and where some good fucking and sucking will come in handy . . .

Of course I did, Roxanne. I thought I might use it eventually.

 

[Roxanne Appleby]

Of course I did, Roxanne. I thought I might use it eventually.

Whew! I was pretty certain you would have, but that word "deleted" always scares the daylights out of me.

 

[deathlynx]

I agree, not weird at all...And pretty much for all of the reasons mentioned above...

Not much to add really just my acknowledgement of agreement since this isn't a poll

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

If you figure out the solution to this one, please let me know! My Halloween horror submission is all but finished, but there's not a single line of sex in it (no good for Lit., I know). I've got a couple of sections marked where sex scenes could fit in smoothly, but they aren't *really* neccessary so it's tough to figure out how to include them.

Nyte_Byrd,
I'm not sure sex is a total necessity in a holiday story on Lit. This was my Christmas 2003 submission that had no sex at all and did very well.

http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=116801

 

[nyte_byrd]

Nyte_Byrd,
I'm not sure sex is a total necessity in a holiday story on Lit. This was my Christmas 2003 submission that had no sex at all and did very well.

http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/showstory.php?id=116801

Thanks Jenny, that definitely made me feel better!