Think I should try it?

[Brett315]

A young woman, about 25, has been married to her husband Mac for about two years. Mac hasn't touched Sam since their wedding night and he's always away on business. Unknown to Sam, Mac racks up $50,000 in credit card debt and other 'debts' that he has occured and now they are about to lose their home if they don't pay up.

Mike, Mac's business partner, comes to Mac and tells him he'll pay off the debt if he can have one night or two with his wife, Sam. Mac readily agrees and they set up a weekend in which Sam will be with Mike at his beach house in south carolina. Sam is not happy at all, but she doesn't want to lose her house, so she agrees. When she meets Mike, she thinks there is something strangely familar about him.

Being a gentleman, Mike talks with and makes dinner for Sam upon her arrival. After talking some more, she finds out that he was her old best friend since childhood and he has lost a lot of weight; which made it hard to know it was him. And then of course they screw around.


Now, do you think I should do this story? I can do a 3 part story that starts back from college, then from the weddind in which she moved and sadly lost touch with Mike, and then have a third part in where Sam finds out a secret about Mac and her marriage. What do you think?

 

[GratefulFred]

Not too much to the plot outside of an indecent proposal. Add a twist or something else to make it different and less cliche'.

Put your noodle into it.

 

[VoyageToBeyond]

a different take would be to have sam be one of the "in" girls in school while mike was a fat nerd who she was mean and cruel to. this is revenge on his part. perhaps, in the end, sam actually falls for him over her scumbag of a husband.

another, is turn it into non-consent - have mike force her to do all kinds of indecent things, film it and post it on the internet for pervs like us to watch! but through it all, though a bit cliche, sam discovers her submissive/exhibitionist side and goest through a sexual awakening.

just some thoughts...

 

[CWatson]

To me, the most interesting part, the emotional heart of the story, is Sam's relationship with Mike in light of her marriage to Mac--the way Mike's presence makes her re-evaluate her husband, the way her husband makes her re-evaluate Mike. As such, I think you should start straight off with that. Begin with Sam being "propositioned" by Mac/Mike and then go from there, with any other information related via flashback or narration. You can still have three acts, but don't do college-marriage-present, start in the present and keep going.

(And by the way: Yes, I do think you should try it. )