TheJabbers novice musings, feedback please.

[thejabber27]

Hi made this thread to get feedback on poetry, which is one of my stress reliefs. This first one is a haiku, inspired by the Illiad
Cause gotta respect the canon.



Mushroom grasps the moon,

While the torch burns the orchard,

A saga renewed.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

There's maybe this thread you might find interesting.