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[Wildcard Ky]

Here's a pasted copy of feedback that I received on this story.

White Husbands Are Such Assholes...
05/02/07 By: Anonymous in Jersey Girl
The day I decided to be blacked was the day I declared myself a free woman. And I made it stick. I also realized that by telling my story I was rubbing it in to every shallow bastard of a so-called husband in this world. So. Scott didn't approve any "Miscegnated" relationships? Fuck him! You Go, Girl!

I approved of my getting fucked by different boyfriends, and even receiving "Presents" that my sad little hubster has seen and has wondered about. "How did you afford that diamond bracelet, honey?". "A birthday present from my boss, honey". (That he gave me for dressing in my birthday suit!".)And all the "evening meetings" spent being wined and dined by my boss's best customers (black AND white). One older gentleman wants me to come vacation with him in Cabo this spring. And my boss WILL cover for me. This gentleman has a bottle of viagra and a big dick all with my name on it, and a payday of $25,000 for ONE Week with him in Cabo.I've already gone on many short vacations with my boss, and I just found out that I'm 6 weeks overdue for my period. And it isn't my husbands, either! It could be one of four gentlemen. All rich , generous to me, and with lots to lose to a woman they scorn. And they won't!

My being fucked senseless every day is a wonderful thing, and the fact that I have more money than my wimpsband makes me feel powerful! What the hell; who needs him? I'm calling the lawyer tomorrow and file. HE cheated on me, so now I'll go public on him! And deny a decent sex life with him, publicly!
Cheat on ME, will he???

WTF was that all about? LOL!

 

[skippycheese]

I guess your inspiring?

 

[slyc_willie]

Ah, the wonders that result from Catholic Guilt and too much alcohol . . . .

Seriously, though, sounds like you touched one serious nerve, Ky.

 

[starrkers]

Life imitating art?

 

[Wildcard Ky]

Life imitating art?

I'm thinking something more along the lines of "girl indulging in copious amounts of alcohol, then hitting the keyboard".

 

[Equinoxe]

The day I decided to be blacked was the day I declared myself a free woman.

I never realised that black was a verb.

 

[scriptordelecto]

Well Ky, I suppose if you want to inspire your readers, you certainly achieved that. I,m not really sure WHAT she's inspired to, but....

 

[FatDino]

I never realised that black was a verb.

Perhaps she was talking about this:

black: If a trade union blacks goods or people, it refuses to handle or work with them.

As in she refuses to work with her hubby?

or maybe this:

black: to put a black substance on something or to make something black.

But this one doesn't make any sense...not that the first one makes any either.

 

[fcdc]

Perhaps she was talking about this:

black: If a trade union blacks goods or people, it refuses to handle or work with them.

As in she refuses to work with her hubby?

or maybe this:

black: to put a black substance on something or to make something black.

But this one doesn't make any sense...not that the first one makes any either.

She couldn't have been. She spoke about "miscegenated" relationships a sentence later - anti-miscegenation laws are those that used to exist, forbidding marriage between (and thus mixture of) ethnicities or races.

ETA: Sorry, Dino! Missed the sarcasm in your post until the post below mine went up.

 

[Equinoxe]

Perhaps she was talking about this:

black: If a trade union blacks goods or people, it refuses to handle or work with them.

As in she refuses to work with her hubby?

or maybe this:

black: to put a black substance on something or to make something black.

But this one doesn't make any sense...not that the first one makes any either.

Well, no, neither does; clearly that is not what she is referring to.

I meant, rather, in the sense that she used it, which I suspect is rather colloquial, to say the least (I actually wasn't aware of the first definition you gave, though it seems pretty straightforward in context).

 

[slyc_willie]

Since this seems to be an open forum . . .

I got this one a little while ago. One of those comments on a story that bothers me just because of the pretentiousness of the commenter:

Great story only surpassed by the writing of someone with much talent.

Only...Dan Tanner, Robert Urich played Dan Tanner a Vega P.I. and he played, among other things, Spenser in Spenser for Hire.

I knew Bobby, as well as, Robert Parker who wrote Spenser for Hire. The three of us sparred a few rounds at the gym in Boston when Parker was filming his television series in Boston. He lives in Cambridge. Also, Robert Parker was one of my creative writing professors. Your character's chosen name ruined the story for me but your writing ability over shadowed whatever difficulty I had reading it.

Great read. I recommend it to anyone who wants to get off.

By the way, do you have any stories that do not get the designated H for hot? (lol)

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So, I ruined the story, but it was still good? WTF?

 

[Edward Teach]

Damn, Ky, I gotta read that story.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

A bit more elaborate than the usual (for me, at least) run-of-the-mill, "What a crock of shit."

The only similar one I've gotten was this anon response to my "Nurse Nailed" stroke story.

Been there.......Done that.......Loved it.
I know the delima she was in in this story, I was fucking a guy in my office and I know my husband didn't know and his wife didn't have a clue that her beautiful black hunk of a husband was fucking me silly two and sometimes three times each week.Believe me when you are getting something that looks like it belongs to a horse,it ain't easy to go back to six inches. Yes this story brought back memories.
Thank You.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[3113]

WTF was that all about?

Have you been writing in Loving Wives again? (smacks Ky on the knuckles). You know what kind of people hang out in that category!

 

[fcdc]

Hooray, I got one!

A 25% vote with no details on why the story was so terrible (I think it is miles above the first one I did) and the comment:

What's wrong with Prague?
05/16/07 By: Anonymous in Scotland
I don't get the Prague/Czecago connection. Prague is not some burnt-out hulk, but one of the most beautiful medieval European cities. I believe it is now pulluted with Golden Arches, but other than that I can think of no connection with Chicago. I haven't been there, but I am told on good architechtural authority that my home city of Glasgow is the nearest European city to Chicago - but they are way different!

Dear Anonymous,

"Welcome to Prague" was an actual sign per Jerry Rubin's book 'Do It!' that was held up at the convention center. That title is reflected in the "Czechago" gag, not "Chicago," also from Rubin. Please to be blaming Jerry Rubin, and not me, and please to be reading the quote that starts the story, where you can understand the title!

Signed, Someone Who Has Absolutely No Beef with Czechoslovakia Whatsoever, But Doesn't Get Why Anyone Wouldn't Get the Title's Meaning Especially When the Sign's Used in the Story.

 

[gauchecritic]

Hooray, I got one!

A 25% vote with no details on why the story was so terrible (I think it is miles above the first one I did) and the comment:



Dear Anonymous,

"Welcome to Prague" was an actual sign per Jerry Rubin's book 'Do It!' that was held up at the convention center. That title is reflected in the "Czechago" gag, not "Chicago," also from Rubin. Please to be blaming Jerry Rubin, and not me, and please to be reading the quote that starts the story, where you can understand the title!

Signed, Someone Who Has Absolutely No Beef with Czechoslovakia Whatsoever, But Doesn't Get Why Anyone Wouldn't Get the Title's Meaning Especially When the Sign's Used in the Story.

That's what you get for being urbane.

Subtlety doesn't cut it either, it just gets read over.

What? You think Lit readers actually read all of your story?

I'll bet you believe that AHers read the entirety of your posts too

 

[3113]

Signed, Someone Who Has Absolutely No Beef with Czechoslovakia Whatsoever, But Doesn't Get Why Anyone Wouldn't Get the Title's Meaning Especially When the Sign's Used in the Story.

I agree with Gauchecritic. You deserve such feedback for (1) being intellectual and subtle, (2) expecting your readers to actually notice details, (3) using historical/cultural references in your story.

Don't you know that readers are only expected to read the sex scenes? If they have to read more than that...well, I don't know what writers will do to erotica next...put in a plot maybe? (shudder)

Really, what were you thinking?

 

[Wildcard Ky]

Have you been writing in Loving Wives again? (smacks Ky on the knuckles). You know what kind of people hang out in that category!

Nope. I don't have any stories in loving wives. That ones in "interracial".

 

[Bedtime Storyteller]

I'm so glad I saw this thread. I needed to sound off about one of the morons who sent not one, but TWO anonymous feedback emails on my story Doctor's Orders.

First came this:

Gina??????Come on no girl uses the word gina! Use anything other than that...God that's like something a 12 year old boy would say.

Then, after I posted a reply in the public comments, explaining that I work in Labor and Delivery (my female character is a midwife), and we do, in fact, use this term with moms, I received this:

what a stupid thing. you write like you are twelve years old.

WTF???

First off, if you're going to tell me I write like I'm 12, then be brave enough to sign your name. And second, this story is a DIARY ENTRY. No girl writes in her diary like she talks to everyone else. Her diary isn't for public consumption!! And obviously, he (or she) hasn't read any of my other stories.


ETA: I got another one today, but this time as a PC on Working Late Ch 3:

W. T. F.
05/17/07 By: Anonymous in U S A
This is some really sick, disjointed, frusterated, anoying shit. Sick young lady in your little fantsey. Good luck

Aside from this person's need for a third grade spelling class, if you don't like the subject, don't read it!

 

[Guest]

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No story listed (must be "A Big Weekend").

For some reason, I'm not offended. I think it is a case of FUI (Feedback Under the Influence).

 

[Stella_Omega]

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No story listed (must be "A Big Weekend").

For some reason, I'm not offended. I think it is a case of FUI (Feedback Under the Influence).

Oh, you've just been visited by the word-salad critic!

 

[galaxygoddess]

o.0;;;;;;;;


reading that made my head hurt...

 

[damppanties]

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No story listed (must be "A Big Weekend").

For some reason, I'm not offended. I think it is a case of FUI (Feedback Under the Influence).

Oooh! This is the same one who's in my sig. I imagine him really angry, spitting the words at me. It's great entertainment.

 

[flavortang]

I delete all Lit feedback because it's all garbled spam-speak. None of it makes sense and I think it's intentionally nonsensical. Someone out there is spending a lot of time not making any sense.

 

[tickledkitty]

My feeling about this person is that it's someone from the AH. The messages are meant to be entertaining.

Tickykitty why you not be nice to the alien in zee Marsh. he wants
write storyies when learns spell gooder. genius at shirk.

I recieved this after joking around with Marsh on a thread in the Story Feedback Forum.