The story is good, but the techincal aspect sucks

[bluntforcemama]

This isn't really aimed at anyone in particular, honestly! I've noticed while perusing the stories that there are a ton of technical mistakes that easily could have been avoided by proofreading and a good editor. For some editors grammar and technical writing in innane. Take advantage of that. The one mistake that irks me the most is whole/hole. I'm laying there reading a great story, and then I read " he thrust himself into her wet whole..." and all is lost. The story goes in the trash, never to be read again. It's very disturbing! I have visions of whole wheat bread and whole cakes of whole grain flour.

 

[Spinaroonie]

How could the kid know about the secret area in Super Mario Borhters 3 if he had never played the game before?

 

[modest mouse]

For some editors grammar and technical writing in innane.

You were saying?

 

[bluntforcemama]

Ahem.... that's "brothers."

 

[bluntforcemama]

Re: Re: The story is good, but the techincal aspect sucks

You were saying?

lol... good for you. Thank you, I was waiting for that. INANE

 

[sexy-girl]

maybe it was metaphorical ... her whole ... her essence ... her being ... or maybe not

 

[Darkthought]

Using "tounge" instead of tongue. That's the mistake that kills me. I had a text in college that repeatedly had that mistake in it.

 

[bluntforcemama]

maybe it was metaphorical ... her whole ... her essence ... her being ... or maybe not

Hello sweetness. Upbeat as always, I see.

 

[modest mouse]

Re: Re: Re: The story is good, but the techincal aspect sucks

lol... good for you. Thank you, I was waiting for that. INANE

It is also 'is' not 'in'.

 

[sexy-girl]

Hello sweetness. Upbeat as always, I see.

yes i do seem to be that way thank you ... its great seeing you posting here i hope everything is going well for you ... with your art and hubby