The right person

[cam31camm]

I have posted a couple stories here (Lake Geneva, Lake Como, and Cape Cod) and I wonder if perhaps I am writing in the wrong person -- first person. My latest is a collaboration with someone I met in the chat rooms, so i switches gender at a break (Lake Genoa Bookstore, recently posted).

Any thoughts? And any feedback on the stories themselves?

 

[KillerMuffin]

You're not writing in first person, sweetie. You're writing in second person.

"I went to the store." First.
"You went to the store." Second.
"She went to the store." Third.

There was a discussion about this particular perspective on another thread, one regarding CAT~~'s stuff. http://www.literotica.com/forum/showthread.php?threadid=21557

Cape Cod, Lake Como, Lake Geneva are the links to your stories. You can hit the quote button under my post to see how I did it.

From what I can tell you have a very good handle on description and sensuality. You also are able to develop the story, but I didn't read past the first paragraph. I have too much trouble with second person. I find it irritating.

 

[cam31camm]

your honesty is refreshing and amusing...thanks for the help